Heartache Hangover

April 26, 2009
By jennnnnnn BRONZE, Irvine, California
jennnnnnn BRONZE, Irvine, California
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One day, you will wake up
to a morning when the sun disappears
and the only things you feel
around you are your pain and your fears

When all your ears will hear
is a neverending rain
and your mind carries the
heavy burden of the feelings you contain.

When you mouth resists telling truths
in fear of hearing lies
and the only part of your body that
works are the tears that stream from your eyes.

When all that you lost
was never able to be found
and you are reminded of when
your heart sank and hit the ground.

That night when he told you
that your love never mattered
and as he walked away,
your heart separated and shattered.



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on Nov. 25 2009 at 10:23 pm
darkdestro27 PLATINUM, West Jefferson, Ohio
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hey whats up how are you ........... squirrel

i love the way you write i may have inspired you but i am definetly inspired by this peice

on May. 14 2009 at 10:48 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Hey! Thanks for the comment on my poem, I really appreciate it. On the ending, I made it short and left the ends open on purpose. I didn't want to dictate the feeling that one should feel at the end, instead, I wanted to leave it open for people to put their own personal spin on it.



Anyways :~)



I took your advice and checked out yours work, and I was DEFINATELY not disappointed. I really like your rhyme scheme and the strong emotions you convey!



Thanks again for your comments on my poetry, I hope you will check back in a read my others works when I post them!

Seth1 BRONZE said...
on May. 11 2009 at 10:20 pm
Seth1 BRONZE, Republic, Missouri
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Don't really have any.

hey, this is good!

I liked how used rimes like that

and its not like humpy dumpy

good job!




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