(the radio speaking)

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KICK3593 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2009 at 11:56 pm
Tell me something, how am I supposed to know how the radio is speaking? It is merely the radio, sitting on something like a coffee table or a chair, that is putting through its own individual transmition, and so who is there to translate but the radio itself? We have one thing, not a group, and not a pair. WE have one thing availabe for misinterpretation, sitting-duck existance, life unknown to corruption and vice versa, and eyes looking upward at the obvious settlements of humans.

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EdytD said...
May 11, 2009 at 11:50 pm
like you say, though, how is the radio speaking? your poem is very unclear, and as you do not discuss this, the poem remains banal and the reader merely skims over the lines. If I were you, I would add another verse after this - as though this was the intro, and then go on.
 
EdytD said...
May 5, 2009 at 7:18 pm
it's neat - I like it!
 
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