If you would be so kind

April 14, 2009
By Borrelli SILVER, Little Rock, Arkansas
Borrelli SILVER, Little Rock, Arkansas
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If you would be so kind
To lend me your time
I think Im falling for you

Many say it wont work
others say other words
Just ignore it all

You are incredible
out of the ordinary
unbelievable to me

Whatever you ask me
I shall give you an answer
Let me know your thoughts
Leave nothing out

Lonliness is gone
everything is filled
again I am happy
virtually invincible, in
every way possible

my thoughts wander
everything feels complete

The author's comments:
There is a message in the last 4 stanzas of this poem. (Read the first letter)

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on Jun. 17 2009 at 4:08 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

Wow- not only do i love the image it gives, but the hidden message is creative and well.. fantastic! I think even better is: first message , you; it's telling how he is. The 2nd, will; It's talks of how you will do anything he asks or wants- like it's your will to do that for him. 3rd, leave; It'll give the exact opposite feeling of what's described in the stanza. 4th, me; It tells about you[me] . I don't think i ever could have done that 8) It's awesome!


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