The Safe Haven

April 23, 2009
By J.R.Hensel BRONZE, Mexia, Texas
J.R.Hensel BRONZE, Mexia, Texas
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When do the Stars come out?
Who do they come out for?
A broken soul,
lost alone in the world.
the light of the stars to go by.
But the shining star never seemed this dark,
Is this what I've come to?
Not even worth the light of the stars?
Why must i be alone in this world?
Does it matter?
Why would I want to live in this accursed place, anyway?
Yet I do.
But why are we doomed to live in this place we love so much.
The Darkness of the shining star,
Fades into Sunlight,
The Safe Haven.

The author's comments:
This peice started as a simple English project for Concrete Poetry. I personally hate this poem (all my freinds loved it), but I could not just leave it sitting around. Read and Critisize.

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This article has 2 comments.

on Oct. 6 2010 at 4:01 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson

Wow Jeff. I really like this. It really makes you think... 

Great work :)

on May. 29 2010 at 1:19 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I'm one of the friends who loved it. How can you hate it - It is amazing - sad but relatable. You are a great writer Jeff.


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