Carless Avenue

April 7, 2009
By Ruthey GOLD, West Midlands, Other
Ruthey GOLD, West Midlands, Other
16 articles 0 photos 19 comments

I didn’t know-In people’s houses, their children
Running and shrieking with spring delight-
That garlic could smell so strong.

The scent of their cooking seeped through the untimely bricks
Giving homely warmth to the street itself.
The children were red-headed, the bushes arching

And framing a magical view through a tunnel of natural delights.
It was whimsical and pearly,
Tinged with a sepia nostalgia.

The photographic light filtered through the pale, baby leaves
Soft and painterly. The breeze whispered
Against my turned cheek.

The friendly ghosts searched for their secret peace among the milk bottles,
And the front door clunked shut
Leaving a comfortable silence.

The author's comments:
i was delivering leaflets in a different area in my city that i hadn't really visited before, and it was around the time the primary school kids get let out in the afternoon, so the quiet streets were suddenly disturbed by the kids with their mothers walking home. i saw them running out of a snicket by the side of the road and when i looked down it it was an avenue of bushes that created a corridor of leaves and light. the whole thing was kind of nostalgic, so that's why i pursued the photographic theme. i'd really like to know what you think about this, i don't have anyone else to share my poems with, and we don't have anything like this in the UK, that i can find, so it would be great to speak to other teen writers! thanks!

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on Oct. 17 2009 at 11:41 pm
megaphoneradioraid SILVER, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Ceci n'est pas une pipe.

This is stunning

EdytD SILVER said...
on Apr. 29 2009 at 12:30 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Great imagery - it's strong and provides a clear image for the reader. I'm not really sure what garlic and screaming children have to do w/ each other, though - that paragraph doesn't seem to flow. You say that "you don't know" that garlic smelled so strongly, yet in the middle you go on to mention the children. It was a little unclear, but other than that, great job! :D



I'd love if you took a look at my poetry. Thanks!

EmilyRose said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 7:52 pm
This is the first poem of your I've read, and I liked it very much. The language was very poetic, I'd say. I didn't really understand it, but I never really understand ANY poems, so that just means that this can be truly identified as A POEM. I'm waffiling on here. It's good. START WRITING SOME MORE!!!!

on Apr. 27 2009 at 9:28 pm
usuallyandante BRONZE, Great Neck, New York
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Hey, Ruthie, on your comment on "need love" poem, you said that I'm a he? For your info I'm a sheeee. But that's okay. Just saying. I love your poem. It's great.

Chilli said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 3:02 pm
Pretty good to be honest and good inspiration. I give it 5/5


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