Carless Avenue

April 7, 2009
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I didn’t know-In people’s houses, their children
Running and shrieking with spring delight-
That garlic could smell so strong.

The scent of their cooking seeped through the untimely bricks
Giving homely warmth to the street itself.
The children were red-headed, the bushes arching

And framing a magical view through a tunnel of natural delights.
It was whimsical and pearly,
Tinged with a sepia nostalgia.

The photographic light filtered through the pale, baby leaves
Soft and painterly. The breeze whispered
Against my turned cheek.

The friendly ghosts searched for their secret peace among the milk bottles,
And the front door clunked shut
Leaving a comfortable silence.

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Sharon M. said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 11:41 pm
This is stunning
EdytD said...
Apr. 29, 2009 at 12:30 am
Great imagery - it's strong and provides a clear image for the reader. I'm not really sure what garlic and screaming children have to do w/ each other, though - that paragraph doesn't seem to flow. You say that "you don't know" that garlic smelled so strongly, yet in the middle you go on to mention the children. It was a little unclear, but other than that, great job! :D

I'd love if you took a look at my poetry. Thanks!
EmilyRose said...
Apr. 28, 2009 at 7:52 pm
This is the first poem of your I've read, and I liked it very much. The language was very poetic, I'd say. I didn't really understand it, but I never really understand ANY poems, so that just means that this can be truly identified as A POEM. I'm waffiling on here. It's good. START WRITING SOME MORE!!!!
usuallyandante said...
Apr. 27, 2009 at 9:28 pm
Hey, Ruthie, on your comment on "need love" poem, you said that I'm a he? For your info I'm a sheeee. But that's okay. Just saying. I love your poem. It's great.
Chilli said...
Apr. 25, 2009 at 3:02 pm
Pretty good to be honest and good inspiration. I give it 5/5
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