He Went Out with His Boots On

July 11, 2011
By Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
5 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni


Summary:

Chapter 2. Please tell me what you think.


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He Went Out with His Boots On


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on Oct. 7 2011 at 9:08 pm
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
5 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni

Thanks so much! I have chapter three done and will try and submit it soon.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 9:42 am
BrokenTogether GOLD, Saraland, Alabama
10 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love...and be loved in return..." -Christian, Moulin Rouge

All I have to say is...WHERE IS CHAPTER THREE? What you have going here is seriously amazing...please, please, PLEASE get the next chapter up soon!

on Oct. 4 2011 at 6:15 pm
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
5 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni

Sorry I posted the first chapter anonymously. If you search He Went Out With His Boots On (Ch.1) it should show up.

on Oct. 4 2011 at 12:00 pm
WhiteWidow GOLD, Bakersfield, California
14 articles 3 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not fair because no one plays fair and survives.

I couldn't find the first chapter; where is it?

From what I've read, the story sounds good.  A few 'we's and us.  Maybe a heads-up when you're gonna change P.O.V.'s.  Other than that, awesome job.


julian GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2011 at 2:15 pm
julian GOLD, Eugene, Oregon
17 articles 17 photos 223 comments

Favorite Quote:
The goal is not about living forever, the goal is about creating something that can.

I really like the pacing and the mood of the story! Wonderfully done! It sounds like you've heard about the pov thing, so I won't add to that. All I'd say to add would be more character development. I'd like to know what the characters are thinking and feeling, in more depth. There were several grammatical and spelling errors, but other than that, great job! Keep it up!

on Sep. 30 2011 at 10:47 pm
introducingshelby GOLD, San Diego, California
15 articles 1 photo 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People change so you can learn to let go, things go wrong so you can appreciate them when they go right, and things fall apart so better things can fall together."
-Marilyn Monroe

Okay, either I was really confused in the first one, or I didn't read it right.. I thought the speaker (in the classroom, not the FBI officer) was a girl. OOPS. Okay. I liked this c: It's really different from anything I really ever have read. Continue it :D

on Sep. 30 2011 at 5:41 pm
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
5 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni

Ok yeah I will defenietely work on the pov thing. Thank you so much for commenting.

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Sep. 29 2011 at 8:52 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

I Agree With Her About the point of view thing but other than that, it kept me reading which is awesome:) good job!

on Sep. 26 2011 at 9:26 am
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
5 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Excuse me while I prepare my impromptu remarks. -Winston Churchill

Tell it like it is, not how it was. -Jonathan

Break it down like a fine English double-gun. -R. Bitoni

Thank you so much for commenting. I get what you are saying, thanks for pointing it out, I hadn't noticed it before.

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 3:11 am
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

THis is great! I read the first chapter and commented on it, too. You should add the first chapter so that people don't get confused... Also, I think we should be able to tell when we switch back to the narrator's point of view, because the description of Harold getting out of bed and reporting for work obviously isn't from the narrator's point of view. But still, nicely done! Keep it up! 5 stars!


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