June 20, 2011
By sarahkay022, Baltimore, Maryland
sarahkay022, Baltimore, Maryland
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Exhaustion pushes people to their breaking point. After an entire day of driving, Mike begins to fall asleep at the wheel. A near accident is enough to send he and Kate searching for a place to stay for the night. They find a sweet old woman who gladly welcomes them into her home. However, her unfriendly daughter Alice is not so welcoming. After a night filled with horror, the couple finds themselves trapped with their hosts after a sudden snowstorm.

Sarah K.


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sarahkay022 said...
on Jul. 19 2012 at 7:25 pm
sarahkay022, Baltimore, Maryland
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Thanks for the feedback guys, it's really appreciated. <3

sarahkay022 said...
on Jul. 19 2012 at 7:24 pm
sarahkay022, Baltimore, Maryland
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Thanks! This was actually just a short story I had to write for school, so I had a page limit. But I could develop it more now! (:

on Jul. 13 2012 at 12:49 pm
Desmothenes Locke GOLD, Cresskill, New Jersey
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The plot behind the story was strong, and the bedroom scene was artfully crafted. However, the rest of the story seemed rushed and unfinished. Development needs to occur within the characters, it can't just happen. Really good story though and keep on writing!

on Jul. 2 2011 at 12:13 pm
tikapeek97 BRONZE, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"good things come in small packages" =)

It was a really good idea, but I think you should make the part just before they left, and the part when the woman was telling them about alice a little longer with more details. Other them that it was a great story idea.

on Jul. 1 2011 at 6:14 pm
mylifeinfiction GOLD, Pagosa Springs, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm just saying, it's not all sand castles and ninjas."
--Libba Bray

Really good storyline--I like that the idea that they're trapped with these strange people. Maybe you should develope it more. It moves so fast, you can't really take it in. But nice idea, good writing!

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