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Blunt's Solitude

May 28, 2013
By hodges.wt, Statesboro, Georgia
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hodges.wt, Statesboro, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Quoth the raven: 'Nevermore'" --Edgar Allan Poe


Author's note: I hope that people will enjoy this story, as I hope to write more like it someday. The idea for the story just came to me one day, while I was running.

The author's comments:
The beginning of the book. Starts the mystery.

December 3, 1894

Dear Mot,
I am gravely sorry for the demise of your father. I have looked at his will, and found that he did not bequeath 20 acres of land to anyone. The land is where he died. The land only appears on one map I have found. I have enclosed the map, which is from 1750. The area is titled Solitude. No one has occupied or trespassed the land except your father.
Sincerely,
Sir Walter Wilkinson

When Mot received the letter in his mailbox, he was unaware that his father owned land titled Solitude. He looked around for the map; it was not in the envelope and not on the floor. He started writing a letter to Sir Walter Wilkinson.

Dear Sir Walter Wilkinson,
There is no reason to apologize. I have a few questions. When did my father receive the property titled Solitude? I was not aware that he owned it. Where is this property located? I would like to visit and perhaps sell it. Can you send another copy of the map? The last one I lost. Lastly, why has no one inhabited the property?
Best wishes,
Mot O' Brien



Thunder rolled. Soon, rain poured down. Mot started preparing a loaf of bread for dinner. As he put it in the oven, he heard a knock on the front door. He opened the cheaply made wooden door, and a man, who was seven feet tall, dripping wet, stared Mot in the eye. Finally, Mot spoke.

"How may I help you, sir?"
"Don't go. Solitude has a curse. Don't go. I warn you now."
"Excuse me?"

Before Mot had finished speaking, the man walked away. The tall man got in a carriage, snapped a whip, and the horses took off. Mot went back inside the house and smelled the bread. He took his bread out of the oven and wrote in his journal while eating the oven fresh bread. When Mot finished writing in his journal, he retreated to his bedroom, and read a book. When he finished reading, his vision changed. He was standing on a tiny patch of grass. He walked toward the only thing in sight, a graveyard. As he approached, a cold wind swept through the area. A leaf containing a word flew towards his face. He snatched it out of the air and read the words "Solitude, 1800." When Mot arrived at the graveyard, he bent down and read one of the gravestones inscribed "Jonathan Blunt 1700-1781 ‘A blessing in our lives.' R.I.P." The ground erupted at Mot's feet. A withered, gray hand grabbed his ankle, pulling the rest of his body out of the ground. It stared at Mot. It said "The land has a curse. Those who come never leave. Don't come. I warn you." As the body stood up, the man was almost seven feet tall. The body disintegrated, along with Solitude. When Mot's vision returned, he was still standing in the graveyard. This time, the words on Jonathan's gravestone were not visible. A dead body lay at the grave, but it was not Jonathan. It was Mot's father. The body looked as if it had just died. His father's fingernails were slightly longer than normal, but that was the only difference. When Mot bent down to touch his father's face, his hand started evaporating. He quickly pulled it away. After a second or two, his hand reappeared. As Mot cried one of his tears fell on his father's face. His father sat up when the tear touched his face. He looked around and saw Mot. He sounded scared as he said:

"Son, no, you should not have come! He did horrible things! Curse! Beware!"

His father rattled on like this for several minutes, talking about a curse. When Mot asked him what curse, his father laid back down, closed his eyes, and did not breathe. When Mot cried, another tear fell on his father's face. Once again, his father sat up, looked at Mot, and told him he should not have come. When Mot asked his father a question, his father would lay back down and die. Eventually, Mot figured out the pattern. As he cried, he was careful not to let his tears fall on his father. Soon, the vision deteriorated. The man who had appeared at his doorway hours before stood next to him when his vision returned. He said:

"Earlier, I warned you not to come. When I arrived here, I got visions so bad they drove me insane. I killed myself. I am aware that you still wish to visit. Beware of the curse!"

"Who are you?" asked Mot.

The man looked at Mot and did not answer. Instead, he slowly turned to dust. When the dust blew into Mot's face, he woke up, breathing hard. He was not in the graveyard, he was in his house, safe. Mot lay there, breathing, for a few minutes. Just as he was about to get up, he saw a face in his bedroom window. Mot stared at the window until he gathered the nerve to stand. He looked away to make sure he would not step on something, and when he looked back, the face was gone. Only then did Mot realize that not many people could look in his bedroom window, as it was six and a half feet from the ground. He got up and walked out of his room, grabbed his shotgun, and quietly walked out on his porch. The area was quiet enough that he could hear his heartbeat. He cocked his gun, and searched the area for the person that had looked into his window. There was a movement in a bush, and he fired, but it turned out to just be a rabbit. After a while he calmed down, thinking that he was being crazy. He went back into his house and took the bullets out of his shotgun. He looked at his clock, and, realizing that it was almost dawn, made breakfast. He ate on his front porch. He took his spoon and set a bite of his oatmeal to cool. He let the steam rise and warm his face; it was cold outside. He took his bite, and a man walked up to him. It was same man who had come the previous day and appeared in his dream. He was carrying a letter. He handed it to Mot and said:

"I have read this note. You plan to go to Solitude. Do not. I warn you, stay here!"

Then the man walked off, leaving Mot with an open envelope. He pulled out the letter and read it.
It was from Sir Walter Wilkinson.

Dear Mot,
Solitude is _________. I hope that you have success selling it. Your father acquired the land in 1874. Why no one has entered the property is a mystery to me. I would also like to tell you that the police that entered the land to retrieve the body of your father have not returned. Sincerely,
Sir Walter Wilkinson

Mot crumpled the note after he read, seeing that it was useless; the piece of paper containing Solitude's location had been cut out. Mot decided to go to the courthouse and look at the deed to the property. He went outside and got in his carriage. He snapped the whip and steered the carriage out to the road. It was an hour-long ride to the courthouse; he lived out in the country. About halfway to the courthouse, his horses stopped obeying him. They stopped and grazed in the field next to the road. No matter how many times he whipped them, they did not obey. Then he noticed something, standing behind him. It was the man who had given him the letter. He asked the man what happened, but the man walked up to Mot's horse and rode off. Mot bit back the urge to cry. He walked up to his horse that was left and tried to get on it. When Mot touched the horse, it sped off in the direction that the man had gone. He walked back to the road and walked towards the courthouse. He was going to get the courthouse if it took all day. He walked for a while, the sun beating down on him. He wiped the sweat off his brow. He stopped; his throat was burning. He had not brung water with him; he had expected to ride in his carriage. He looked at his watch. The courthouse would close in an hour. He had barely made it halfway in two hours. He would not make it in time, so he headed back the way he came. He walked for a half of an hour and stopped at an inn. He asked for a room. The desk worker gave him the keys to a room on the fourth floor. Mot climbed the tall, menacing staircase. He had walked all day and did not want to have to climb the stairs. He ascended them slowly; he had just stopped sweating. When he arrived on the fourth floor, he realized that his room was down another long hallway. He sighed. All he had wanted was rest. He walked down the hallway, ignoring the people staring at him as he walked by. When he got to his room he realized that he did not have sheets on his bed. He considered going back down to the front desk to ask for some, but he was too tired.

The author's comments:
Starts Mot's hunt for Solitude

When Mot woke up, he saw a man at the end of his bed. But this man was not solid, like a normal person. He was shimmering, and when the sun came through the window and touched the man he hissed and started to disappear. He moved back into the shadows. He looked down at Mot.

"Wake up, Mot."

Mot sat up and looked at the figure, who was now avoiding a patch of sunlight.

"I am growing weaker. Soon I will be impossible for me to able to appear in a human form, which means I can only show myself at night. You must not go to Solitude. I went to see Blunt's grave, and he appeared to me, telling me not to go. I did not listen, and went anyway. It is the reason I am dead. You must not go to Solitude, son."

"Dad?" asked Mot. By the time the word left his mouth, the sunlight had covered the entire room, causing his father to dissipate into smoke. Mot walked down the staircase to the bottom floor. He walked to the desk, laid down some money and tossed his room key to the desk worker. He opened the door and left the building. The sun was not bright, which confused him. He looked at the sky and realized that it was overcast. He walked out to the road and started walking to town. He looked at his watch. He would get to the courthouse by noon. He started down the dirt road, hungry and thirsty, headed to town. Every time a carriage passed Mot's face would get coated in dust. He wiped the dirt off and kept walking. He was going to get to the courthouse, even if ghosts appeared to him and carriages passed him. The longer he walked on the road, the dirtier he got. By the time he reached town he looked positively dreadful. He walked through downtown in a daze; he was almost to the point of passing out. Eventually, he entered a diner, "Townville Diner". He sat down at a table, ignoring the waitress that told him he had to wait to be seated. When he sat down in the chair he waited a minute or two and then ordered a water. When the water came he reached to pick it up and knocked it over. The water dripped on his lap, causing him to realize what had happened. He stood up and asked for a towel. When he stood up, snickers went through the Diner. He looked down and realized that his pants were wet. He took the towel and sopped up the water. He had his glass refilled. He was careful not to knock it over this time. When he took a drink, he felt immediately better. His stupor wore off and he paid for the water and left. He headed to the courthouse, looking in the windows of shops that he passed. He reached the courthouse at 2:00. He entered the courthouse and went to the desk. He asked for the deed to "Solitude." When the desk worker checked, he said that there was no property named "Solitude." Mot thanked the worker and left the building. He walked to the police office. When he arrived he asked where Mr. Mershung had died. The police chief looked in his files and reported that there was a death record for Mr. Mershung, but it not include cause of death or site of death.

"Then how did you find his body?"

"Someone reported his death on a telegram. When we traced the telegram, no one was found. The only thing we found was your father, and he was lying next to a grave. None of my men could figure out how he died. It appears to have happened for no reason."

"Can you tell me where the telegram was sent from?"

"I'm afraid not. You have to have clearance of Level 3 to see that data. As of now, the only person that has looked at it other than me is some man named Sir Walter Wilkinson."

"That's my lawyer."

"Then he can tell you where the land is if he sees fit to release it to you."

"You don't understand. I've contacted him and asked him, and he sent a letter that listed the site of the place, but there was a hole cut out of the note. I've seen my dad's ghost, the ghost of some guy named Jonathan Blunt, and have seen Jonathan Blunt's body rise out of a grave in a dream."

"Sounds like you've got some type of problem. There's a psychiatrist down the street. Now, if you don't mind, I have more pressing matters to attend to."

"But....sir...." stammered Mot as the police chief left the room.

Mot slammed his hand on the table and left the room. Maybe he was overreacting. He left and went back to the Townville Diner. He was lucky, none of the workers that were there when he ate at there the first time were still there. He waited to be seated and ordered a sandwich. He realized that he had missed lunch and it was almost dinner time. He ordered a drink. When his food arrived he started to formulate a plan. He would go to Sir Walter Wilkinson's house and ask him to tell him the place of Solitude. When he left the restaurant he decided to look around town; he did not come to town often. He walked down Main Street and looked in the windows of the shops. He looked into a clothing shop and saw a man getting fitted for a suit jacket. The man turned and looked at Mot. It was Jonathan Blunt. He looked at Mot and said, which Mot heard through the window, these words:

"I told you not to go. I have taken all the files. I warned you."

Mot blinked, and when his eyes opened again, the man was normal height, and was someone he had never seen before. He felt nausea coming on. The man shouted at him.

"What are you looking at? Go away!"

Mot hurried away from the window; he did not want to start a fight, especially when he was nauseous. He headed to the town's inn, "Townville Inn & Tavern", and requested a room. He took the key and headed to his room. This time his room was on the second floor, so he did not have to walk far to get to his room. He arrived at his room and walked to his window. He sighed. The last three days had been insane. He was dreadful. He had not known that going to Solitude could cause him so much trouble. But that it's caused him so much trouble made Solitude even more interesting. He wondered why there were no documents or maps that contained Solitude. He was going crazy.

The author's comments:
The End

Mot thought that if he could see ghosts, that maybe he could summon them. He tried in many ways to send for his father's ghost, asking, pleading, begging, offering food, but in no way would his father appear to him. He laid down on the ground, crying. Originally, he wanted the money for Solitude, but he had become obsessed with finding it. He tried one last time to call his father.

"Please, Dad, I need you. Please, let me see you one last time."

He did not think that it would work, and saw that he was right. He put his head in his hands and sobbed. When he looked out of his hands he saw a man standing in front of him.

"What're you doing down there? Get up!"

Mot looked up and saw his father. He stared in disbelief. He blinked to make sure that he was not seeing things.

"Dad?"

"Yes, Son. I am here."

"Can you tell me where Solitude is?"

"Physically, yes, I can tell you."

"Will you tell me where Solitude is?"

"No."

Then his father vanished. Mot was frustrated; his father would not tell Mot where Solitude was located. He sobbed again.

Mot pulled on his hair. He would not figure out where Solitude was for a long time, unless he died. He was never seen alive again. People reported hearing a gunshot late on December 7, 1895. The police found the body of Mot the next day. He was dead; a bullet had gone through his head. They buried him on Solitude, next to Jonathan Blunt.

The author's comments:
The Epilogue. I might want to write a sequel

Mot's cousin woke up early on December 10, and received a letter. I was from Sir Walter Wilkinson. It began:

Dear Thomas,
I am gravely sorry for the demise of your father and brother. I have looked in your brother's will, and found what he did not bequeath to anyone...



Mot opened his eyes and all he saw was light. A bright, white light. But it did not hurt his eyes. He blinked a few times. When the light was gone he looked down at the ground. It was dirt, and a stone was behind him. It had his name on it. He had made it to Solitude. He did not care that he was dead. Then he heard a voice behind him. It was Jonathan. Jonathan looked at Mot and said: "You might have figured it out in life. But you did not. I will tell you now: I own Solitude. The land is actually named ‘Blunt's Solitude'."



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jelly bean said...
on May. 6 2015 at 3:48 pm
what happened next?

PatrickEDC said...
on Apr. 26 2015 at 2:26 am
PatrickEDC, Kansas City, Missouri
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I hope you don't mind criticism. I've found that's how I improve most in my writing. First off, one of the main things is that you always refer to Mot as either "Mot" or "He." This gets a bit redundant. Try interspersing those with descriptive phrases or adjectives such as "The boy" or "The young man." Also, I find it hard to picture Mot. You need to describe him, paint a picture of him in your reader's mind. At the least give us his age, or an approximation of it. Secondly, this is more of a format thing, every paragraph should be indented and separated from the others. That's the nitpicking in me coming out. Third, the whole thing is a bit choppy. It doesn't seem to flow very smoothly. Sort of like this. I am giving you an example. See what I mean? You need to vary the lengths of sentences more; most of them are short, with a few long. That's the main points I see. Hope this helps you to improve your writing.

Coolio said...
on Jun. 3 2013 at 8:08 pm
I want to know what happens! Write more about this story!

Gran said...
on Jun. 2 2013 at 4:31 pm
Very creative. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading your next story.

hodges.wt said...
on Jun. 2 2013 at 1:30 pm
This is my first teenink story!