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Virtually Lost

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Eric M.
Virtually Lost
Summary: Matt was just a normal gamer that only wanted to follow in his father's footsteps in creating new technology. That all changed when he is forced to fight for his life, inside a game of his own making.





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Jun. 1, 2013 at 11:55 pm:
Here's my impression from the first 5 or so chapters.   Your plot moves way too fast. You need to slow down a bit and take the time to show your reader the details instead of just telling them to us. For example, in the first chapter, you tell everyone that the main character is the laughing stock of the school. Instead, how about backtracking a few days and writing a scene with the main character at school, and reflect a little on his thoughts there. This does take a lot of work, b... (more »)
 
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Mrs. Hamers said...
Oct. 17, 2012 at 3:05 pm:
This is phenomenal! The suspense is almost too much! Keep it up Eric M. :)
 
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Liz F. said...
Jul. 16, 2012 at 7:47 pm:

This is my first visit to Teen Ink as I was introduced to it by a young man who authored "Virtually Lost".

I very much enjoyed "Virtually Lost" and look forward to reading more from him.

 
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