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Hey, thanks for commenting on my story!
I read this, and I liked it a lot. It's very creative and you used a lot of good writing techniques!
You need to work on spelling and grammar though. Like when the demons said they wanted her sole, it's actually spelled 'soul'. Sole is used when you're talking about the sole of someone's shoe or something.
Another thing is that I learned in language arts is that you start a new paragraph whenever someone says something.
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