My Dirty Little Secrets

October 13, 2011
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows


Summary:

this is a story about a girl who is physic and has her secret reveled to the shool and now every one thinks she is a freak so she has decided to get back at her by selling her soul to the demons


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My Dirty Little Secrets


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on Nov. 16 2011 at 9:27 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

thank you all for comenting on my story I really apriciate it thank you for all the nice words you have writen, and once again thank you all so very much love ya

on Nov. 3 2011 at 10:32 pm
Eliahumandoglover SILVER, San Francisco, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream." --Mark Twain "Being tactful is saying someone is open-minded when they have a hole in their head."by???

 I like the idea but there is no action and no character, or descriptive details. It has a great plot though.

Fizza SILVER said...
on Oct. 29 2011 at 2:02 am
Fizza SILVER, Raipur, Other
8 articles 2 photos 177 comments
nice work. love it keep it up. :)

on Oct. 25 2011 at 2:21 pm
kingofwriters BRONZE, DeWitt, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Books are a uniquely portable magic." - Stephen King

I love books, and I love technology, but I don't want to see the latter overwhelm the former. I just think books are meant to be pages you turn, not screens you scroll through.

Hey, thanks for commenting on my story!

I read this, and I liked it a lot. It's very creative and you used a lot of good writing techniques!

You need to work on spelling and grammar though. Like when the demons said they wanted her sole, it's actually spelled 'soul'. Sole is used when you're talking about the sole of someone's shoe or something.

Another thing is that I learned in language arts is that you start a new paragraph whenever someone says something.

But other than that, it's very good! Keep it up! :)


on Oct. 24 2011 at 9:24 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

I don't think that there is any set time for how long I think they get to it when they do

on Oct. 18 2011 at 8:55 pm
Miki-chan BRONZE, Waynesboro, Mississippi
3 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't screw with Crazy.

I'm curious; around how long does it take for an article to get posted on the site? I've got two that are still not on the website yet.

on Oct. 18 2011 at 9:11 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

as soon as I can I will add more chapters to it

on Oct. 17 2011 at 7:42 pm
Miki-chan BRONZE, Waynesboro, Mississippi
3 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't screw with Crazy.

I thougt this was a very good story. I love supernatural stories, but what happens from there? Is there a sequal?


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