To Be a Monster

February 27, 2011
By SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."


Summary:

I see you’ve chosen this. Interesting. It must mean that you have good taste. This is my story of how I, a teenage girl of almost total normalcy, became a monster, a beast, a creature of the dark. There are many places to start. I could begin at my birth and continue on based upon a collection of childhood stories of me doing cute things told by my parents, but that’s not how you start a story like this. You start with the end, or maybe the near-end. Once you've entered my world, there is no going back. You've been warned, so enjoy the ride as best you can.


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To Be a Monster


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leafy said...
on Sep. 23 2011 at 8:41 am
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

I loooove this story! I want more! I would suggest though to separate dialogue and paragraphs, but you seemed to do it more towards the end. Nice job! 5/5

on Sep. 10 2011 at 10:45 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

The dialogue is very realistic, but in the beginning, they should have been separated into paragraphs. I do like what you have so far, and I'd love it more if you expanded on the chapters a bit more. The idea is very cool and I'd love to read more :)

on Sep. 3 2011 at 4:06 pm
jackieyimlovah, Simi Valley, California
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
i am who i am

omgee its so good! i love it! 

on Sep. 3 2011 at 1:50 pm
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

Thanks!  There does seem to be a surplus of vampire books ever since Twilight became popular.

on Sep. 3 2011 at 9:44 am
BriannaLeigh SILVER, Paw Paw, West Virginia
5 articles 3 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." -E.L. Doctorow

I admit, I haven't finished it yet, but it's nice to see something so well written not entirely focused on "vampire romance".

on Aug. 14 2011 at 3:09 pm
Pedophobic BRONZE, Moreno Valley, California
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want people to be themselves, be prepared to expect not only the best of them, but the worst as well.

Thanks thatbwas helpful :B

on Jul. 31 2011 at 9:34 am
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

Sorry, TI hasn't had the time to make that button available for books and such.

on Jul. 30 2011 at 5:29 pm
Pedophobic BRONZE, Moreno Valley, California
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want people to be themselves, be prepared to expect not only the best of them, but the worst as well.

lol im a noob here

'hi oldfags :]

but i dont know how to add books or authors to my favorites ;----;

can you tell me?


on Jun. 2 2011 at 8:28 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This is a good start.  The only criticism I have is to put dialogue on a line separate from your paragraphs more often.  It just makes it easier to read.

on Apr. 26 2011 at 7:16 pm
GlassXRose BRONZE, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
You're doing a GREAT job! I can tell you're going to get better and better, and this story will be polished and sanded down until it is PERFECT!

on Apr. 18 2011 at 7:59 pm
x-CaptainMonica-x BRONZE, Alpena, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not a statement as much as just a move of passion."

"ultimate doom"   i like how that sounds

on Mar. 5 2011 at 10:59 pm
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

lol okay please keep me posted, i wanna know what happens next

on Mar. 5 2011 at 6:34 pm
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

Haha!  It's only been a few days!  I'll write more once the homework flow slows a bit.

on Mar. 5 2011 at 6:28 pm
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

8( you still didn't write more? D; why do you hate me soooo much?!!!!   lol jk, but I do wish you write more soon ^-^

on Mar. 4 2011 at 7:31 pm
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

I know... :-/  I had the story just collecting dust on my computer, so I decided to post it, imperfections and all, just to see what kind of feedback it would get.  So far, pretty positive.  I appriciate your input!  :)

on Mar. 3 2011 at 2:27 pm
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

Lol, I love the fifth chapter's ending

on Mar. 3 2011 at 12:40 pm
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

spacebar honey, use it

on Mar. 3 2011 at 10:07 am
MysteryHeart GOLD, Thorold, Other
14 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
Usted es especial! AKWARD!!! (in an opera like voice), ohhh fasha', what the huh?,who in the name of what?, sanity now!

Very VERY VERY!!!!! RAW manuscript, but great story line. you should try to make the chapters longer.... if you got a good editor to put his or her input in andchange some thingsadd some stuff this would be amazing

on Mar. 3 2011 at 9:15 am
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

I onlyread til chapter two. but so far its excellent! The summary really made me want to read this. And now that I started reading it I really don't want to stop. If I could rate it 10 stars, I would :D


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