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Nighttime Shadow

For a moment I just watched the glass, but suddenly fear, frigid and gripping, shot into my heart. I ran to close the window and only wondered what this alien people would do to the girl who helped her sister run away. I was alone now, not only isolated, but one Gia weaker and more vulnerable. I was no longer one of two girls. Now not only was I the only prisoner, I was a felon.

Suddenly a low, startled noise choked near the door. I froze. I heard angry bustling.

Mud Judd swung open the door.

Judd’s eyes widened. He saw me standing there, alone by the window, petrified. He looked like a raptor, ready and eager to snatch a kill. The door slammed. Judd had disappeared outside. We should have known they wouldn’t leave us without a guard. He sprinted down the pathway, calling furiously to the others.

The hunt for Gia began.

The cabin was clean and small. My breath didn’t echo; it simply disappeared. A silence, an isolation expanded throughout the room, increasing like a virus and hanging spitefully by my face. The silence waited for me to notice it. I closed my eyes, but Ori’s image appeared loudly in my mind so I opened them quickly again. The silence pounced when I stirred, its arms crossed haughtily, sneering. Finally, finally I faced the isolation, and it held up a mirror. I saw myself standing idly in an unguarded cage while my brother remained unaccounted for and while my sister raced for her life. What a fool!

I lunged towards my pack and slung it over my shoulder. Gia, Ori, or bust, I thought to myself. I cannot do nothing.

I quietly turned the knob. The outside air hit me with physical force, but I tightened the straps on my bag and stepped into the enemy camp. I was surprised to hear hurried voices so close, and I know they were looking for Gia. I crept into the bitter darkness, alert and alone.

I slinked across the cabin wall. The night was young but imposing. I was thankful as the darkness washed over me like a cloak. I hoped it would hide my sister too.

The path was wide, and I knew I would be completely vulnerable if I ran across. I looked about and saw nothing but the roaring light of a bon fire licking the night air. I dared not approach that place, because surely they were congregated there, chewing their bones and grinding their meat. I turned instead in the other direction, running away from where Gia had gone, and hoping that their fields marked the boundaries of their village.

Suddenly a shot fired. Gia shrieked.

She was distant and I couldn’t hear her words, but Gia was unmistakable. They had overtaken her. I pictured her now, bleeding to death and begging for help from the heathen who stuck a bullet in her gut. I pictured Judd’s face as he struck one final time. I felt sick. Soon they would feast again to celebrate a second kill. I couldn’t think about it for long.

I hadn’t gotten far. I knew I could return to Zaida’s cabin right then and no one would ever know I had left. But now they had captured her. I could not turn back. If Gia could not run to Skyta then I would assume her role. I would go get help. I would sprint the month-long journey in one night and somehow communicate Gia’s danger to the Skytan medics and then make it back in time for them to fight off the warrior and stop her wound. I knew it was a bad plan, but I did not think about it. I just went.

I darted across the path. I thought no one had seen me. I ran to hug the next cabin wall. I took a breath and skirted towards the next. I almost wanted to hear voices or footsteps, just to have some idea of which places to avoid, some idea how close I was to capture. I ran to the next, and realized gratefully that the cabins were thinning. That also meant, however, that my hiding spots were thinning as well.

Not too far ahead lay a large field. It must have been an orchard in the fall, but now the naked trees waited for the spring, standing in rows like an army and stretching toward the moon like claws. Netlike shadows from their branches flashed across the ground when a stray flame from the bonfire leaped like lightning into the air. I would have been grateful for lightning. Silence had found me when Gia left and now had stalked me here.

I sprinted into the orchard. I crawled and ran amongst the trees, hiding in their spidery shadows. My vision blurred in a soup of memories and fears, but I forged on, determined this time not to collapse, not to submit to weakness.

Suddenly all my senses heightened. I had heard something. Or, I thought I had. The silence suggested I had only imagined it.

But before I could act a rough hand clamped over my mouth. They had me.

“Otter, it’s me! It’s Lazaro,” whispered a voice. He removed his hand and helped me to stand. “I just didn’t want you to scream. You’ll be fine. They don’t know you’re here. I’ll protect you.”

My breath caught. My warrior had come.

I looked into his face: playful, handsome, and familiar. It was so nice to recognize someone! The red handprint had started to peel.

“You don’t talk much, do you?” he asked, smiling through his eyes. “Your brother doesn’t either.”

“You saw Ori?” My hands jumped to his arms and my eyes searched his face. I couldn’t wait for his answer. I needed to find it first in his expression. “Tell me he’s alive!”

Lazaro’s face dropped. “You think he’s dead? Who told you that?”

“Is he alive?”

“Of course he’s alive. I just saw him at the feast. Why didn’t you come?”

Relief fell over me like a wave. I wanted to laugh and to cry. I spread out my arms and hugged my Lazaro, burying my face in his chest. A vague and uncertain voice in the back of my mind muttered something about impropriety. It cautioned that I barely knew this boy, but that voice finally surrendered. I didn’t know if I was crying, and I didn’t know if I was happy or worried or confused. All I knew was his warmth and the gentle way he was laughing now. He pulled me close to him and ran his fingers over my hair. He smelled new and earthy, like dirt, the rich kind of soil that nurtures plants to grow. I was no longer alone.
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BrielleM-JustAnotherOwl-This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 25, 2011 at 7:47 pm:
Hehe. Now I'm just pathetically waiting until new chapters are up...
 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 3:02 pm :
I'm so glad!  I will be posting chapters 13-16 very soon! :)  Thanks for all your votes and support!
 
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Medina D. said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 2:51 pm:

oh, and i forgot to say i love how almost all the chapters are named after colors. i got caught in the story, i felt like i knew all the characters right away. And it was cool how instead of starting the story with a huge introduction, you just started the scene.

Ok, NOW I'm officially done with my feedback :)

i'll be sure to buy this book in barnes and noble!! ;)

 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 9:52 pm :
Thank you thank you thank you thank you.  This comment really made my day.  Thank you!
 
Medina D. replied...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 11:44 am :
your welcome :D
 
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Medina D. said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 2:49 pm:

Hi Emily. Thanks so much for asking me to read your story!! i enjoyed reading every chapter. You have excellent writing skills, i tell you. Of all the nice novels i imagine on the shelves of bookstores, this one would fit right in. The words weave together so beautifully. You say so much in so little words. The story.........how it was written........when i read the summary i knew it was going to be a good story. This is authentic sci fi right here. I'm enchanted, impressed. WOW *rubs eyes in... (more »)

 
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mummers4 said...
Mar. 20, 2011 at 6:29 am:

Dear EGRAM

Yesterday, I reread the first 8 chapters of your story and then read your latest chapters.  Your latest chapters are as outstanding as the first 8.  Your characters have life and involve the reader with their problems and feelings. I can't wait to read more. This book should certainly be published!

 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 9:52 pm :
Thank you, mummers4, for all your feedback and support!
 
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lotrisamazing said...
Mar. 19, 2011 at 7:01 pm:
This is so good! I am not very far but I want to keep reading because I need to know what happens! It is very well written, not choppy, not overdone, and I like the perspective and setting!
 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 9:51 pm :
Thank you!  I'm glad you like it!
 
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PJD17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 8:10 pm:
i'm very impresed with this story  i read the whole thing in one sitting, and couldnt get enough of it,  i love the way the characters are written, and the story flows marvelously  i'm not much of a sci fye fan, but i greatly enjoyed this story  keep it up!
 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 9:51 pm :
Thank you so much.  You commented on all of my TeenInk writings and I'm so grateful for that!  Your feedback is so encouraging, and I can't thank you enough.
 
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koolwords said...
Mar. 17, 2011 at 6:21 pm:

well, this is one of those "oh my goodness" stories. It's really well thought out, and the more I read the more I like.

 

I think the romantic part is really nice, and the almost kind of secrecy behind everything is cool too.

 

I haven't finished yet (becuase of that evil thing called school) but I can't wait to read more.

 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 9:50 pm :
Thank you.  I really appreciate your comment, and if you do get a chance to finish it, please let me know what you think of the rest! :)
 
koolwords replied...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 6:43 am :

Hey I finished it and it was really good.

I liked how there was this kind of twist were you aren't sure who's the bad guy. Then the whole thing about the society's laws about no outsiders. It's just cool.

 

Keep writing because I'm sure we're all waiting for the end and we all would rather have it sooner then later.

 

Rock on!

 
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star3x8 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 6:26 pm:

Wow! This is really good! You got my attention from the very beginning, when you explained that Ori has a "sense", for a lack of better word. And then you have a scene where both parents die. You have a great start- and I just finished chapter 1.

Great job! I'll definitely continue reading.

 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:15 pm :
Thank you!  Please let me know what you think of the rest!  I look forward to your comments!
 
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BrielleMThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 7:04 pm:
This is insanely great! I could definitely see it as a published book. I love the characters. I'm only on the seventh chapter, but I'm already sold on it. (:
 
BrielleMThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 4:44 pm :
Alright. Done. Could you please post more? It's so amazing and now I really want to know what will happen! (:
 
EmilyGram replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:14 pm :
I'm so glad you've finished it and commented!  I have decided to post the next four chapters on Monday (Mar 21) so they should be online by the following weekend!  Please comment again after you read them...I would love to hear what you think!
 
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