Angel-The First in the Angel Trilogy

December 15, 2010
By skyblue95 PLATINUM, Bear, Delaware
skyblue95 PLATINUM, Bear, Delaware
35 articles 1 photo 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am paraphrasing, of course. "My only fear is that when they are turned to loving they will find we are turned to hating." -Reverand Msimangu, Cry, The Beloved Country (a book by Alan Paton)


Summary:

Angelica moves to a new house-again. Once there she meets a group of six girls that are just like her, and who quickly accept her into their circle. And she also meets a very interesting boy named Riley who seems perfect for her-he is just like her in style and mind! But is Riley really exactly like her, or is he more than what he says he is?


Sierra M.

Angel-The First in the Angel Trilogy


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on Jul. 17 2012 at 4:36 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

Great job! Can't wait to read more!!! :D

 

~Free :)(:


AshuM said...
on Apr. 10 2012 at 1:34 pm
AshuM, Denver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Love and Hate are very strong words."

I really enjoy this :)

T.J Jackson said...
on Aug. 22 2011 at 12:09 pm

This was a brilliant story! I really want to read more && can't wait for the second one! I really could use your feedback on my very own story about "vampires"! 

It's called The Cousins Of Devereaux. Check It Out please&& Thanks! 


on Aug. 4 2011 at 4:00 pm
RhythmAndRhyme BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
4 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There's no half-singing in the shower, you're either a rock star or an opera diva." ~~Josh Groban

This was amazing! I had a great time reading it. I think it was a little slow for a while in the middle, but it really picked up afterwards. I can't wait until the second one comes out.

(I use a kind of "stars and wishes" method when I comment; stars are things I liked and wishes are things I didn't so much.)

Stars!: The overall plot of the story was very well thought out. I also loved the description and the life you were able to give to the characters in a mere 12 pages. Very well done! I'm also impressed that you were willing to include "bad words". (Heh.) I'm always disappointed at least a little bit when writers aren't willing to kind of "embrace" real life in that way. I personally, am I fan of incorporating swear words in my stories. You did a good job of helping the characters evolve throughout the story, as well! I was very impressed. (Wonderful way to leave a reader hanging at the end, as well! I want more!)

And now, for the wishes: There are only a couple of issues I had when reading this, most of them purely punctuational. One being that there were, in many chapters, no paragraphs...this slowed my reading, and ultimately changed the reading experience, but not so much that I could not enjoy it. (And I did ever so much enjoy it. I am only worried that other readers will be turned off by this, and miss the wonderful story you weaved.) Also, there were some minor issues with grammar, such as using the wrong spelling for a certain word, but this was very rare. Just one more: I thought that parts of the plot got kind of slow (and maybe a little tedious) during the middle parts, but then things really kicked up again near the end of Chapter 9.

All in all, extremely well done! Wonderful job on the whole thing. I've already bookmarked the page in my computer. I loved the whole idea of the story, and you're obviously a talented writer, judging from this novel. 5/5! Kudos! :3


Tayrl BRONZE said...
on Apr. 12 2011 at 7:45 am
Tayrl BRONZE, Rockhampton, Other
4 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the moon

yay! ^_^

you're doing really well,  I was hooked. Can't wait<3


on Apr. 12 2011 at 7:21 am
skyblue95 PLATINUM, Bear, Delaware
35 articles 1 photo 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am paraphrasing, of course. "My only fear is that when they are turned to loving they will find we are turned to hating." -Reverand Msimangu, Cry, The Beloved Country (a book by Alan Paton)

I'm working on writing the second one now. It's coming along I guess but I've been really busy with school and stuff so. But I'll try to get it on here as soon as possible. :) lol

Tayrl BRONZE said...
on Apr. 12 2011 at 6:56 am
Tayrl BRONZE, Rockhampton, Other
4 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the moon

ahh! i want more!!! hehehe:)

on Feb. 23 2011 at 6:25 pm
O_______O WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW didn't see that comin

on Feb. 23 2011 at 6:20 pm
oh wooooooooow! *swoons* how cute!!

on Feb. 23 2011 at 6:12 pm

okay so i lied i didn't post anything for chap 2 T_T sorry

can i punch lindsay? please? no? Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww T_T


on Feb. 23 2011 at 4:00 pm
hey CC, it's me, i'm gonna comment on each chapter ^^ just cause i can. anyway, there were only two gramatical errors, i can't remember the first one but the second one was when you were explaining the rutine (sp?) its atE dinner not at dinner ^_~ but other wise it is PERFECT! okay i'm gonna keep going, see you next capter ^^


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