sorry You can't see the link for my Jess and Gavin "actors". :'(
Just type in Courtney Visser and Nick Russo into Google Image search. It should be the first picture
Short and sweet is a great way to describe your story!
However, I think the story itself was rushed a little. You could have expanded the beginning a bit to show how their love grew and how how this started. The attack itself, seemed a little unprovoked and not very rational. Maybe add some reasoning behind it (the attack).
But I love the ending, it adds a new twist. Maybe you could write a sequel about whatever Jess has become.
I loved this story on the whole. I wish it ... (more »)
Thanks for your comment! ;P
To be honest, I just wanted there love to just start with a kiss. In my mind, they never even talked to each other until they met at the bar. So, their love started just at their moment.
I do agree with you I am very rushed when I write stories, but that may be because I watch too many shows with fast plot lines. (I like trying to give people a mental movie.)
The attack, I tried to make it seem like he was going to ra.pe her, but maybe it didn'... (more »)