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Making You Mine...

Author's note: What inspired me to write this piece? Wow, let's see. Um... all my fiction work is actually just...  Show full author's note »
Author's note: What inspired me to write this piece? Wow, let's see. Um... all my fiction work is actually just a really twisted version of things that do go on this world and I try to incorporate a lot of maturity and importance as well as comedy and action. I realised people are taken from their normal lives and are forced into situations where they feel as if they do only have two choices and in their case neither sound endearing, I just really wanted to spread the this message. Please post this everywhere, this can help you anytime...
"When there are only two clear options available to you, make a third..."  « Hide author's note
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A New Name/ Nickname

Chapter Two
Frozen in fear and frozen in bitter cold.
I’m not having a great night. Morning. Same thing. Slowly I raised my head to where he stood. He was – my age, maybe older. I’m thinking twenty one. And he was devastatingly handsome. Pushing the annoying yet obvious thoughts out of my head I focused on describing him. He had eyes like two emeralds polished and glimmering, his cheekbones were somewhat prominent and his hair was a dirty blonde falling messily round his head.
I dedicate this chapter to my favourite author Derek Landy who showed me just how affective comedy can be, I'd never tried it before I read his books. No I haven't copied his work. Thanks for reading. Can't do it without you guys.

Gathering all the courage and spirit I could muster I stood up. “Can I help you?” I asked confidently but politely.
He completely ignored my question. A large smile spread across his face curving to his right, tilted. He was wearing jeans and a hoody. Not that what he was wearing really mattered, just that he was dressed like he was from a gang or something. Which I found somewhat worrying.
“What are you doing out here girly?” He asked, sounding concerned. I could bet a million pounds he wasn’t concerned on the inside.
“My name isn’t girly, it’s Grace.” I crossed my arms and pouted. I felt blonde on the inside.
“Mine’s Kaspar.” His grin looked like it could swallow his face.
“Well, Kaspar.” I sighed, agitated. “Could you move out of the way?” I said sternly.
He didn’t waver, he didn’t move just one bit. And his smile couldn’t get any wider then it was at this point.
“Please?” I tried; it came out a bit desperate that time.
“I’m sorry girly but…” He took a step forwards cornering me against the bench, my thighs touching the cold wood.
“No… STOP!” I screamed as loud I could, grabbing the heel next to Kaspar’s foot and holding it up menacingly, as much as I could make it look so. The actual pointy heel aiming at the man’s face.
“Feisty. Nice.” He said. Taking another step towards me. I had no choice but to sit on the bench at this point, he looked scary. Towering above me like that.
He leaned forwards so his hands were on the bench, on either side of me; and his face was but a breath away from mine.
No way in hell I was going to let him get me. I brought my knee up catching him in the groin. I brought my other foot up, placing it on the bench and pushed giving me enough momentum to stumble over the seat. I dropped the heel, my only weapon. My only weapon apart from my own fists and kicks. I’m hoping that ingenuity and strategy also comes into play from my part, but maybe I’m just going a bit overboard now.
I fell to the ground, my thoughts cracked and shattered from my mind. Who am I kidding? I really am defenceless. I scampered upwards, cutting my hands and legs on the rough ground. I could hear him coming after me.
A hand, that most certainly wasn’t mine, clamped around my mouth. Another wrapped around my waist dragging me backwards and hoisting me up.
I struggled for my life. I screamed, it just came out as a muffle. I kicked and trashed, but he pulled me closer to him, the hand around my waist just held me even tighter. I was finding it increasingly hard to breathe.
And what after this night, I was never to breathe again? And why did it just have to be me?
“Now listen here girly, I need you. I’m not going to tell you at the moment but I will tell you. So you just need to shut up…”
“Just let me go!” I screamed, yet due to the hand round my mouth it turned into more of a ‘Juv wet me fo!’
“Sorry, I didn’t catch that girly, come again?” He teased me. He was teasing me. I am not happy.
I screamed and yelled with all my might. This wasn’t much at this point. But I just screamed and yelled. I would not let him get to me.
“I thought you might say that, but I’m very sorry. I just can’t. In fact I think you might rather like it where you’re going.”
“Juv wet me fo!” I shouted continuously.
“I’ll let you go, eventually.” He whispered, his warm breath tracing across her neck. With that he hauled me over his shoulder. I thrashed at his back, so so desperately. “Maybe.”
I felt myself dip and I felt myself fall. I screamed, again. All of a sudden I wasn’t feeling very brave anymore. He pretended to drop me. This is war.

Dear Mother
Fun Times
I must say, she did put up a fight. She is a very funny girl. She looks about nineteen, maybe even twenty, I can’t be sure.
We do miss you, a lot. It feels different. You were always there to keep me and father grounded. And now you’re not here. Everything feels a lot more manic.
This whole celebration and event is so time consuming. Father has no idea what he’s doing. Yet I am absolutely sure it will go to plan. It has done for centuries.
There is simply nothing that could go wrong.
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JustExisting said...
Nov. 26, 2017 at 12:10 pm
please write moreeeeeeeeeeee
candyfromhawaii said...
Oct. 28, 2016 at 3:10 pm
yes moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee please
EstherC said...
May 19, 2015 at 7:56 pm
I love this! You haveee to continue it.
The_Fantasy_Life said...
May 19, 2015 at 2:03 pm
Amazing... You have NO choice, but to finish... PLEASE!!!
Cheshirekat said...
Jul. 11, 2014 at 3:31 pm
Wow you have to finish this!
bubbles6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 28, 2014 at 8:51 am
You should right more, I really can't wait to see where this goes.
LostInStereo said...
Feb. 11, 2014 at 5:49 pm
The storyline is unique, which makes the story very entertaining. However, I agree with the other commenters when they say to check your grammar. Also, be sure to stay in the same tense throughout the entire story. I do the same thing when I write. I begin writing in past or present, and end up in the other. It helps immensely with the flow of the story if you are sure to stay in a single one. Also, it doesn't make sense if the story is in present tense one sentence, and past in the next. Good... (more »)
RoseRatchet said...
Jan. 20, 2014 at 6:41 pm
uniqueish idea, please continue and please check your grammer.
RoseRatchet replied...
Jan. 20, 2014 at 6:43 pm
*grammar, also please ignore the irony of these comments
FallenAngel170198 said...
Apr. 9, 2013 at 9:15 am
Write more please? :D this is awesome
HeLLo2u2 said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 11:46 am
this was realy good but id go through it againg and cheak your spelling and gramar.
RachelB2 said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 7:33 am

"i kicked and trashed"

no, you didn't trash, you thrashed

Cheshirekat replied...
Jul. 11, 2014 at 3:02 pm
The irony of this statment is killing me..
RachelB2 said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 7:29 am

Hey Rachel here

great book and i actually think that it wasn't just cjrlotte using my accoung which she made for me...

FULLSTOP said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 4:25 am

HI!!! annoying psycho here...


a) this is an AMMAZING BOOK

b) whilst it deserves comments, try this: comment on other people's work, and ask them to look at yours when they do. It works

FULLSTOP replied...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 4:26 am
actually, can you look at some of my work? 
Renegade9891 replied...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 4:52 am
kk, I'm a looking.
FULLSTOP replied...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 5:09 am
k btw Lou Lou i can't find ur orum. wassitcalled?
Renegade9891 said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 3:48 am

Hello, everyone. 

I would really appreciate it if you could all vote and comment. I would love comments even if they are negative. I, as a writer, still have LOADS to learn.

Thank you,


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