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The Forgotten

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Chapters:   « Previous 1 ... 9 10 11

Chapter 11 : And the search begins...

Mom and dad are fast asleep when I sneak out the back door. I don't even think twice about what I'm doing, they have hurt me so much. They need to pay. They are the biggest bunch of hypocrites. Only thinking about themselves. Not caring about my feelings, or Leah's for that matter. She will never know the truth if I don't find her. She could die never knowing. Her whole life would have been a lie. She would have passed, thinking she knew who she was, what her family was like.
I should have
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figured it out sooner. I mean, yeah sure, we look alike and stuff but they're other brown haired, brown eyed people out there and we don't have a family resemblance going on. No, this was too bizarre. To think we used to shower together ! I can't get my head around the idea that Leah hasn't got a drop of blood in her body that comes from the Mortel line.
I wonder how she'll take the news, I'm guessing that she'll cry. I know that I would if I were her.
I put my duffel bag and my sister's, I mean Leah's, back pack in the passenger seat. Start the car and back out of the driveway. Once I'm on Oak Street, I head over to the nearest gas station. I won't be able to go anywhere with an empty tank.
As it fills, I head inside to buy a snack. I walk through the double aisle and pick up a water bottle, four granola bars and a pack of mint gum.
The guy rings me up, I pass him a few one dollar bills and count out the exact change in dimes and pennies.
He thanks me as I leave. I'm probably the most entertaining thing he's seen today.
I get back inside my car, a second hand Chevrolet Silverado, that I had acquired when dad had bought his Nissan. My hands, my head, everything hurts. I rest my head against the wheel. I just fell like dying.
A sharp tap on the window startles me, I look over and see the owner who I'd seen moments ago, gazing in, a worried look plastered on his face.
I roll my window down.
“You okay son ?”
He looks like a nice guy, mid fifties, beer belly but clean. He shaves every morning and the ring on his left hand that's resting on my door proves that he's married. I bet you he met his wife in college. This is probably a second job, to earn a little more money. Maybe for a family trip with his two kids. Or his eldest's going off to college soon and needs money to pay the tuition.
“Yeah I'm fine, thanks,” I answer. But I'm not. My parents lied to me my entire life, I don't know what to believe anymore, who to trust.
“Alright, but if you get tired, pull over.”
He's concerned for my safety, the first one to be. “Do you want me to call your folks ?”
No ! Most certainly not !
“I'm driving down to see them now, don't worry.” I don't know why I lie, I could have just said no, thanks.
“Be careful son.” He still doesn't seem reassured.
“I will.” I tell him.
I roll my window back up and turn on the music station once I've left the parking lot. It's the rock station that Leah loves. It's always passing these old songs that no one listens to anymore.
We usually fought over who got control of the music. We would play rock, paper, scissors.
I leave it on though, it's the only proof Leah even existed in my life, other then being a huge lie my parents made up. She was here, not too long ago, beating the rhythms out, while singing to the lyrics.
My sister ? No.
A friend ? Yes, of course.
Maybe, if I hadn't grown up with her, she could have been a girlfriend. She's beautiful, natural, sweet, caring, smart, loving... Any guy would be lucky to have her as his own. To call her his.
I turn my head at the unholy thought. She and I were raised by the same people. We are brother and sister by everything but blood, I have to remember that.

* * *
“Leah, come on, that guy's stupid ! Don't let him ruin your day.” I try coaxing my sister out of her room and down to her own birthday party.
“Leave me alone ! I'm never coming out !” She cries back.
“Please.”
“No.”
“Pretty please ?” I beg.
“No, I said !”
I can tell that she's crying. I can't stand it. She is my baby, it's my role to protect her. From douche-bags like Kyle McGreen. An A-hole that had the audacity to break up with her on her birthday. A day dedicated to her. He didn't even have the guts to do it to her face. No, Kyle broke up with Leah with a simple text message.
I need her to open the door. I need to put my arms around her. I need to comfort her. To brush away her tears and tell her that tomorrow will be a better day, a new beginning. With endless possibilities.
“Your cake is waiting down stairs,” I tell her.
I can hear her giggle and mumble something along the lines of “Idiot”, or maybe “I don't care.” I prefer the latter.
But she gets up and unlocks the door. I walk in. Leah has her arms open, I reach for her and pull her close to my chest.
“I love you,” She says.
“So do I, sis.”
I also add, “You shouldn't care what people think, especially Kyle.”
“Easy to say, hard to do. Everyone loves you ! ”
“Do you want me to kick his ass ?” I suggest.
She laughs then shrugs. Leah shakes her head. My sister isn't the violent type.
Finally, after a few minutes I get her to come down with me to the garden where our family is waiting.

* * *
It's early morning by the time I pull up to an old motel off the Interstate. I grab the bags and lock the doors. The clerk is fast asleep at the reception desk, his drool dripping onto a men's magazine. I shake him and startled he sits up straight and mumbles : “I wasn't asleep, boss !”
“A room please.” I ask.
“Sure, man. For how many days ?”
I think. When should I leave ? As soon as possible. I'll stay for a day, catch up on all the sleep I've missed and then head up the coast. I don't have a clue of where she is and the thought that she might be dead has crossed my mind a few times. If only I had some information on her location, I would know where to start looking.
The clerk hands me a key and directions to my room, first on the left, second floor.
I thank him and head upstairs. The hallway's narrow and dimly lit. The place smells like the sea shore with a slight odor of air freshener. My room number is 201 and the door is made of cheap wood and a keyhole, not an automatic card slide pass thingy, like in most hotels these days.
The inside of the room isn't much better. The floor, walls and furniture are also in wood. The window gives me a nice view over the parking lot. Well, at least I can check that no one steals my car.
There's a bathroom with a toilet and a shower. I refresh myself and strip until I'm only wearing boxers. The bed in nice and warm, hopefully without bed bugs... I turn off the light, waiting for the sand man to take me away and off to Sleep Land, where nothing can hurt you.

An annoying beeping wakes me up. I rub the little sleep that's left out of my eyes and look to see what's making the noise. It's my cell, that I'd left in my jean pocket, which is now on the floor.
I do a double take when I see that it's Leah.
I pick up, my heart half beating out of my chest.
“Leah !”
There's a noise on the other line, then I hear the most beautiful voice, Leah's.
“Hey, brother.”
I bite my tongue, this isn't the way to tell her that we aren't related.
“Where are you, are you hurt ?” I ask urgently.
She laughs into the phone, “Don't worry, I'm fine. I was sick but Adrian took care of me. And as for where I am, I'm not sure. Somewhere between Maine and Vermont. I'm in a hotel.”
“Who's Adrian ? You're kidnapper ? The creep ! I bet you he's trying to sell you to some pimp ! Get out of there, fast ! I'll find you, I'm in South Carolina. I can get to you in four days,” I say.
“Don't, Darik.” I can tell her voice is shaking. “I want to be here, Adrian didn't kidnap me. Things have changed, I can't go home, not now, not never.” She's crying.
I feel like someone's ripping me to shreds.
“Are you pregnant sis ? Did he rape you ? I can help you, you could get an abortion. Leah you can stay with me. We don't need mom or dad.”
“Yes, I'm pregnant.” She's lying, I can tell.
“What's he done to you ?”
Why is she so scared ? Is he holding a gun to her head at this instant ?
“No, honey. I want to stay with Adrian. I just called to say goodbye. Darik, please, forget about me and comfort our parents. Take care of them. And don't come looking for me. I'm safe and happy.”
I'm about to contest when the line cuts and the only noise left is the lonesome beeping.

I get dressed, take my things and head downstairs. Leave a few bills to pay for my room and get into my car. I have my new destination, and it's somewhere between Maine and Vermont.
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MermaidmissyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 9:35 am:
Ahh I so love this book it is very good and heartwarming all at the same time. I think you should keep writing more pages soon. Hey can you look at my stuff and see what you like I have poems and one book on this web site so check it out if you have a chance k. Thank You!! :) 
 
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EbbaRose said...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 1:08 am:
Good story! And great character voice, i love it!!! can't wait to read more!
 
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NikiblueThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 2:49 pm:

I thought the storyline was good and suspenseful. I do have some critics though. I know that a lot of people have already mentioned the spelling errors, and also the weird arrows in the text. Secondly, I feel that a lot of the writing was a little choppy and too quick from one thing to the next. I think more emotion and details should be put in so it feels more as though the reader is there seeing it all for themselves, if that makes any sense?

 

Hopefully I wasn't just rep... (more »)

 
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Drive_it_home_with_one_headlight said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 6:42 pm:
I like this a lot. The paragraphing is weird, though. It threw me off a little bit, as well as the arrows instead of the ". Is there any significance to the arrows?
 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 8:43 pm :
Sorry about that, I just recently bought an American mac so the sighs changed from the arrows to ". In french we don't have " on the keyboard. Same for the paragraphes. In France books aren't presented the same way. Sorry if it caused any confusion. 
 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 8:44 pm :
* signes.  
 
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AspiringWriter said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 12:27 pm:

I love the plot; it's very unique. The summary immediately intrigued me. I'd hate to say this again, but you do have a few grammatical errors. It's nothing too big, and it definitely doesn't take away from your story. :)

 

Hmm. What else? I think that you should try adding more descriptions and emotions. Not too much. Just a little. It'll make the story more vivid, if you know what I mean.

 

Great work! :)

 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 2:58 pm :
Thanks !! I will try adding more description and emotions in my next chapters, I have a hard time with that sort of stuff;) Again thank you for reading !
 
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mrs. mom said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:36 pm:
as a mom, i love this story - age appropriate but exciting, fun,sensual,etc.-it's great knowing that there are those who like to write something other than "texts" - i just wonder if this writer's nightmares are as interesting - please continue
 
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renthead96 said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 5:52 pm:

This is an interesting story. I enjoyed the relationship you created between vampire and zombie--I'm pretty sure I haven't seen that yet. However, there are various spelling/grammar mistakes. You can always have someone else review your chapters to help check for these mistakes: a parent, a sibling, a relative, etc. Just to help with this, I've selected a few common mistakes that you've made to show what you should look for:

"He is aloud to take a break, I'm not angry with Him."more »)

 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:51 pm :
Thanks Renthead96. The next few chapters are going to be back and forth between Adrian and Darik's view, so you will get more information about the whole vampire and zombie relationship. As for the mistakes, thank you :) Keep posted for more. :) and thanks again for checking this out. It means alot to me !
 
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tealbirdThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 1:01 pm:
Ok, I'm sorry to say I only had time to read the first chapter of your novel, but I really enjoyed it. I love the tone of the writing, especially the 'big man Upstairs' part :D. Trust me, you had me captivated and I'll be back to read the rest!
 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:42 pm :
thanks so much :)
 
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Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 12:11 pm:
I really like this story. You do need to revise a few things though. You have a few comma splices--joining two sentences together. Also, I would advise expanding a bit more on the emotional side of your character. Sometimes, she doesn't seem as freaked out as I would have thought. But the story itself is pretty interesting; I can't wait until you post some more. I want to know more about the characters! And I love the whole spin you put on vampires and zombies! Very well done overall! :)
 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:41 pm :
Thank you Garnet77. The next chapter is going to be under another character's point of view... so keep reading ! 
 
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eMiLyP said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 9:44 am:
This is a really good story! I love how suspenseful it is. I really hope you write more because I would be interested in reading it if you did! Great work!
 
RockGirl182This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:21 pm :
Thank you, the next chapters are pending approval, so come back to check it out soon :) I'm going to write much more, I have it all planed out but my chapters are very short so it might take a while. 
 
eMiLyP replied...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 6:35 pm :
Yay! I can't wait!
 
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