Falling For Another One

June 13, 2011
By IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton


Summary:

When Nahla was off for the summer in sunny California, the unexpected took turn. She thought she was walking away from who could possibly be the only bot that ever rejected her, Nathan, but the truth is she's just running to another Nathan with a different name, Romeo. Will Romeo, the new Italian version of Nathan, change Nahla's mind after what Nathan did to her?


Sheyla A.

Falling For Another One


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on Feb. 4 2012 at 3:30 pm
this is amazing!!! i love this, sheyla!! i never knew you could write like this 8D

on Sep. 24 2011 at 12:55 am
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

Thank you... :)

 


on Sep. 24 2011 at 12:55 am
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

I'll post more when i can,, but right now school started and everything... and my laptop is broken soo I'll write more when i could.

Thanks so much for liking my story :)


on Aug. 26 2011 at 5:31 pm
MiNdLeSsLuVeRgIrL BRONZE, Kenly, North Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you love something let it go, if it comes back its yours if it doesn't, it never was!

Loooooooooooovvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeee iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiitttttttttt.

on Aug. 23 2011 at 10:20 am
JustAnotherDay. BRONZE, Andover, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 130 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stephen Fry - There are many people out there that will tell you that "you can't". What you've got to do is turn around and say, "watch me."

You HAVE to reply to me when you finish your story. I love it, its so cute. :3 

on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:43 am
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

Thanks Anya... I'll yltry to be more detail and I'll try to include some of your ideas later on in the stories.. :)

on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:42 am
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

OMJ!! Really?? Joe Jonas Forever!!! Thanks for the feedback btw... :)

AnyaLafayaa said...
on Jul. 3 2011 at 9:29 am
AnyaLafayaa, New Freedom, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is a fire. But whether it is going to warm your heart or burn down your house, you can never tell.


























-Joan Crawford

Great job! I have to say, I think the fact that Romeo respected Nahla's sleeping space says a lot of good things about him. I have several ideas for your book and if you like them, you can use them.

1) Lindsay should sabatoge Romeo and Nahla's realtionship in a very cruel way, maybe by telling Romeo lies about Nahla and Nathan being together still.

2) Romeo should take Nahla to an ocean-side picnic, where a lot of fans can mob Romeo and Nahla gets annoyed.

3) Romeo's old flame should show up and make Nahla slightly jealous and edgy.

4) Nikolai can be angry for Nahla talking to him that way and call their parents to tell them about Nahla and Romeo. Her parents can then try to force Nahla away from Romeo because they think he can hurt her.

Keep writing please. This story is very interesting, but I think it can still benefit from some more details. You should describe more of what Nahla is thinking inside her head instead of a more third-person point of view. What people look like, the expression on their face, what people are wearing, and what they are doing are all great things that can use a lot of description and make your story more real. Overall, I think that once you fix these things, your book can become more thorough and deep.


on Jul. 2 2011 at 9:08 pm
Bookworm1998 GOLD, Brampton, Other
17 articles 2 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
Preserve your memories, keep them well; what you forget, you can never retell.

what a cute ending with him sleeping on the couch, ratehr than with her. i think that says a lot about Romeo. i just love your use of celebrities, too! and i love Joe also! <3 :P

on Jun. 22 2011 at 10:28 pm
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

Thanks for the feedback, I really needed it! :)

on Jun. 22 2011 at 10:27 pm
IndoPandaBear SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction." - Sir Isaac newton

Thank you so much.... I'll try to post more, but my laptop's acting up right now.... :( thanks for the feedback though!:)

on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:32 pm
BrownEyedGirl GOLD, San Antonio, Texas
11 articles 2 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
If life were easy, where is the adventure?
If you never leap, you will never know what it is like to fly.

I really liked it!  I hope you post more! I only think that you could add more detail maybe.  Yet a very good story never the less!

 


AnyaLafayaa said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:36 am
AnyaLafayaa, New Freedom, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is a fire. But whether it is going to warm your heart or burn down your house, you can never tell.


























-Joan Crawford

Wow! I really enjoy this story. It's very creative and fun. My favorite scene is when Romeo's new got sprained! I thought that was outright hilarious. Also, I know you said that you're not sure about this chapter, but it's great. Keep writing!

 



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