A Place Where Magic Happens.

April 8, 2011
By Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."


Summary:

Landon meets a girl named Mae, who works at a stand at the carnival, which makes him keep a little hope in his heart that she just may be the magic that his father had always been telling him he'd find.


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A Place Where Magic Happens.


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on Dec. 27 2011 at 2:34 am
AndSoItGoes01 GOLD, Reno, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"The winter I told you icicles are magic, you stole an enormous icicle from my neighbors shingle, and gave it to me as a gift, I kept it in my freezer for seven months. Love isn't always magic, sometimes it's melting." -Andrea Gibson

It was good and i didnt find very much wrong with it. The only real thing that bugged me was that you didnt really introduce Mae much in the beggining for him to feel THAT strongly about what happened to her. Other then that i loved it, but it isn't my favorite of your writings. :)

on Apr. 22 2011 at 10:30 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

Thank you, I appreciate it.

 

I know the summary to the story isn't that interesting or eye grabbing, and I appologize. My weakness is actually trying to grab the reader's attention, and I wish there was a way I could revise it, but oh well. Thank you for checking it out.


PJD17 SILVER said...
on Apr. 22 2011 at 10:25 pm
PJD17 SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I do the best imatation of myself- Ben Folds

well, i'll be honest, the premise to this story itself is not one that really grabs my attention but dont let that upset you  the writing itself is excellent i think that you do just a wonderful job with your despritions, and i think that the story flows very nicely  even though this particular peice is not one that would grab my attention, i do recognize that it probably apeals to alot of people   obviously everyone has different taste, but regardless of the plot this story was still very enjoyable because of the skill demonstrated in the actaul writing part of it   keep that up and you will go far

on Apr. 16 2011 at 6:57 pm
lucybrown SILVER, Blacksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer

First things first, but not necessarily in that order. ~ From Doctor Who

This is really good; I like the descriptions you use, it makes me feel as if I’m really there, and it’s so realistic it feels as if it could be a movie.  Landon has a very interesting personality and so does Mae.  The only thing I was confused on was when Landon took over the ping pong stand and then it said, “The Snob still hadn’t come back with her for the past hour and a half that I’d taken over the stand.”  When I read that it didn’t feel to me like very much time had passed.  Maybe put asterisks or something to signalize the time change.  Just an idea.  :) 

I really enjoyed reading this though!  Keep up the good work though and I hope you continue on this novel!


on Apr. 14 2011 at 9:51 am
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"A guy walks up to me and asks 'What's Punk?'. So I kick over a garbage can and say 'That's punk!'. So he kicks over a garbage can and says 'That's Punk'?, and I say 'No that's trendy'!"- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

I liked this, it was really neat and your characters were believable and realistic. I hate that TeenInk removes parapgraph formatting though :/




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