April Fresh
Officially my new best guy friend
I was breathing hard and felt lightheaded. “April are you okay?” Justin asked. I nodded, but I knew my face gave me away. “Come on let’s get you outside.” He took my elbow and gently pushed me outside. The second I smelled the fresh air and pine needles I relaxed. “What’s wrong?” I don’t know why, but I told him why I wasn’t exactly fond of Allison. When I finished he just laughed. “Classic Allison. She can’t stand to see something that she can’t have. So she goes through

I really love this book i can't wait for more, if this was published and in bookstores i would just read it all in one day- keep on writing ;)
AWW! seriously? No one has ever told me that before! I will definetly keep you all posted! Two new one's coming this week!
You should take a look at the book i have written called Bulieve , that would be really cool ;)
More, I need more! D:
Lol. No problem. Two new coming your way this week!
I posted a new chapter! I hop you guys like it. This week I'm posting two more!
You are developing the story nicely, I like the characters, and the foreshadowing is a nice touch. One thing that kind of irkes me is that you keep on using "this". It makes your writing seem less mature and the character superficial, I guess that's the effect it has on me. Otherwise, great!
"this" as in- "this nice desk" "this really cool magnetic board", etc., just to clarify
Yeah sorry sometimes I have that problem. I'm glad that you liked it!
i really like your story! you do a good job of giving each of the characters their own personalities. Jake's my favorite :)
keep writing and ide love to read more of your story soon! 5 stars!
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