Unorthodox Angel

December 13, 2010
By laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am too weird to live, but much too rare to die," -Synyster Gates, guitarist for Avenged Sevenfold


Summary:

When Phoenix gets shot by her drug-addicted mother, she finds herself in a hospital. She meets a bad boy named Jakobie. He's covered in tattoos, has black hair, and has a distinct air about him. After he saves her life twice, she finds that she can't live without him, and finds the reason he saved her might have to do with angels.


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Unorthodox Angel


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This book has 48 comments.


on Mar. 23 2011 at 11:08 pm
AislinnKnight BRONZE, Saratoga Springs, Utah
1 article 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't like me, remember it's mind over matter. I don't mind, and you don't matter.

I disagree, only the crash and hospital scene was from Twilight (not that there's anything wrong with Twilight). You didn't fail.

I really liked it, it was really sweet. Jakobi is my type of man! If only there were actual guys like him (sigh). I thought your dedication was really sweet, too. 


on Mar. 23 2011 at 3:09 pm
laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am too weird to live, but much too rare to die," -Synyster Gates, guitarist for Avenged Sevenfold

i do appreciate your comment, but i am a fan of twilight, and i know that only one thing in this story is similar. thank you.

on Mar. 21 2011 at 10:44 am
laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am too weird to live, but much too rare to die," -Synyster Gates, guitarist for Avenged Sevenfold

thanks! i always enjoy feedback!!

on Mar. 17 2011 at 3:55 pm
emmacxoxo PLATINUM, Chelsea, Massachusetts
22 articles 6 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Okay. Okay.

this is a really cute story :) I like the plot a lot and its very entertaining. Just from my point of view you should work on sentence fluency and varying word choice a bit though, because it'll help your overall work :) check out my stuff if u want, but nice job again

on Feb. 3 2011 at 12:40 pm
laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am too weird to live, but much too rare to die," -Synyster Gates, guitarist for Avenged Sevenfold

thank you so much! i love feedback on my stories, positive and negative. this is my first love story, so it's good to know i did it right! thanks again!

on Feb. 1 2011 at 11:03 am
I really liked your story. Phoenix and Jakobie falling in love seems natural and not forced. :)

on Dec. 19 2010 at 6:34 pm
laurenangela SILVER, Newton, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am too weird to live, but much too rare to die," -Synyster Gates, guitarist for Avenged Sevenfold

hey musiclover94! this is laurenangela. you really made my day with your nice comment. i needed it a lot. thanks.

on Dec. 19 2010 at 5:35 pm
musiclover94 GOLD, Springboro, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is uncertain. Eat dessert first.

I think it was so sweet to write this for you grandfather and I'm really sorry for your loss. You're a great writer, keep it up!!


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