Don't Need Anyone

December 10, 2010
By OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch


Summary:

But the chances of those happening are nil.
A million health issues that won't go away.
Parents determined to blow their vocal cords.
A concerned, troubled best friend.
A missing brother.
A strange, artistic guy.
A crazy girl determined to succeed.
What does that add up to?

Filled with laughs, probably not a whole lot of tears, butt-plants and balloons sprouting from kitty bums, follow Renee as she struggles to suppress her feelings(and sarcastic comments) and find her brother before it's too late.


Lexie B.

Don't Need Anyone


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on May. 26 2011 at 1:49 am
savannah tranby, Hawarden, Iowa
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Write more please!!!!!!!!!!

on May. 25 2011 at 7:01 pm
dolphin13 BRONZE, North St. Paul, Minnesota
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Wonderful Novel! I was caught immediately and couldn't stop reading. Keep writing!

on May. 21 2011 at 4:01 pm
-BeautifulFeet- PLATINUM, Maysville, Missouri
21 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited, imagination encircles the world."

I got super excited when I read "headdesk." Fellow nerdfighter?

on May. 11 2011 at 8:04 am
becauseHeloves BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
Proverbs 8:12, 14 "I wisdom dwell with prudence, and find out knowledge of witty inventions. Counsel is mine, and sound wisdom: I am understanding; I have strength."

Oh yeah! I got wrapped up in the compliments I forgot to mention the "credentials"- in other words, what got me hooked and kept me reading. You made the characters believable; the conversations were very realistic and did not sound scripted. You were able to convey a comical, satirical character without an over use of words or cheesiness. I am one happy reader! And again tell me of your work!!!

on May. 11 2011 at 7:56 am
becauseHeloves BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
Proverbs 8:12, 14 "I wisdom dwell with prudence, and find out knowledge of witty inventions. Counsel is mine, and sound wisdom: I am understanding; I have strength."

I must say this is absolutely astounding! This is by far the best completed novel that I've read up here- I actually followed it to inkpop to finish it and I was not disappointed. Sure it had a few grammatical errors, but I almost completely forgot the fact that this was written by a fellow teen! No seriously, it felt like I picked this up of the library or bookstore shelf (perhaps Barnes & Noble ^.^) Keep it up! Do you have any other stories in the works or completed? I would seriously like to read them!

on Apr. 30 2011 at 8:17 pm
biggerinfinities SILVER, Superior, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
“We accept the love we think we deserve.”
― Stephen Chbosky, The Perks of Being a Wallflower

ahhhhhhhhh!!!!!! more more!

on Apr. 7 2011 at 3:02 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I apologize! I've taken it down for editing, and nso I can focus on my current book. I may re-post soon. =)

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on Apr. 7 2011 at 9:32 am
SongSparrow, Evanston, Illinois
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I really wanted to read the rest, so I looked on inkpop and I couldn't find it! I mean I did... Sort of... I searched 'Don't Need Anyone', but it didn't come up in the projects section, I could only find it in comments, and then it wouldn't let me see the actual story. Help!!!

on Mar. 18 2011 at 8:31 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you for the comment! =] On my Word document, the notes are in an entirely different font that looks like handwriting, but on hear, you can't see Italics or different fonts. =P

 

I'll try to get to it, but I have a lot of reads to get to, and my comments are very long. I'll add it to my list. =)


on Mar. 17 2011 at 10:50 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

This is a really interesting story!  I love that the narrator has secrets and a history that the reader has to discover!  Your writing style is clear and simple.  Good job!  When the girls are passing notes, however, it's unclear at first what they are writing to each other.  You probably have those words italicized in your document, because that would help to clarify.  Triteness, such as "diarrhea of the mouth," might be explained by the narrator's voice and first-person perspective, but otherwise try to avoid that.  Finally, I know it's nit-picky but "with a definitive clank" weakens the first sentence.  Maybe use a more active verb?  Anyway, your writing is compelling and clear.  Excellent job!  Five stars! I would really love to read your comments on my work?  My novel White Ribbon can be found in the Sci-fi/Fantasy section. :)

on Mar. 8 2011 at 1:25 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Inkpop is another writing website--the address is w w w. inkpop. c o m without the spaces.

on Mar. 7 2011 at 8:30 pm
CrazyWriter GOLD, Lorton Station, Virginia
16 articles 2 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once you have given up on the most important thing in your life, you begin to die, because then, you gradually lose your true self"~Hana Kimi
"Someone who can lie to themself. . . is lonely, and in pain"~Hana Kimi

inkpop?

on Mar. 7 2011 at 6:03 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Haha thank you. I actually finished the book--the full thing is on inkpop. =]

on Mar. 7 2011 at 6:03 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you! =D  

on Mar. 6 2011 at 5:06 pm
CrazyWriter GOLD, Lorton Station, Virginia
16 articles 2 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once you have given up on the most important thing in your life, you begin to die, because then, you gradually lose your true self"~Hana Kimi
"Someone who can lie to themself. . . is lonely, and in pain"~Hana Kimi

this is great i cant even come up with critizism..........continue please

CRAZwrItER~


on Mar. 6 2011 at 11:44 am
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

WOW I loved this story so far, the sarcasm made me laugh a lot, but the emotionsare really strong too! I love it!!!!  ^-^

on Feb. 28 2011 at 11:02 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you. =) I will certainly try to look at that.

on Feb. 28 2011 at 2:45 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
22 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

hi! u should totally get this published.. it would be too sad if this wonderful piece of work never sees the light of the day.

please check out my work, "the diary of a teenaged lunatic" if u can :)


on Feb. 19 2011 at 2:02 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you! =D I'm going to do some major editing before I start querying, but I will at some point be looking into publication. ;]

on Feb. 19 2011 at 2:01 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Ah, yes, that would be why. XD


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