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The Summer I Found Myself

December 2, 2010
By Anonymous

Summary:

We walked up the boardwalk and a few guys were coming down our way. There were three of them and they were our age, maybe a little bit older. When we got ready to pass them one of them stopped smiling and asked “Did it hurt?” I looked at him confused and asked “Did what hurt?”

“When you fell from heaven?” My face blushed immediately and Shelly started laughing so hard that I couldn’t help but join in.

“I’m Ayden, and this Jason and Carson.” The guy with the pickup like said.

Shelly stepped forward and introduced us.

“Where are you headed?” Ayden asked.

“To the restaurant down there.” I replied.

“Well, we were heading up to the beach, maybe we will see you around?” he smiled down at me and I replied “Yea, sure.”


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The Summer I Found Myself


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on Apr. 1 2011 at 7:23 pm
sfoxxy96 BRONZE, Anniston, Alabama
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that was absolutely awesome!! youre a great writer. keep it up:)

on Mar. 27 2011 at 6:08 pm
ThisIsRivera SILVER, Orchardlake, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
" Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead."

Let me start by saying i really enjoy this im not done yet though :) I really liked the summary i found it really inviting but chapter one made me kind of loose intrest but i kept reading and i definetly think it got a bit better keep writing you re really good!!!!!check out my book so far and tell me if you like it at all :)

on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:25 am
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Thanks for the tips. I am currently trying to smooth out the kinks but I am also working on another title making my time a little bit cramped.

on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:23 am
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

I agree about the choppy sentences but I think if you gave it a chance you will really enjoy it. I am writing another story where I am developing the charaters more thoroughly. Thanks for the tips.

on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:21 am
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Thank you. it means a lot.

on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:21 am
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

I def am writing another book. The one I have going for me now thats uo on this site is Under the Summer Sky. I think everyone will enjoy it as much as they enjoyed this one.

on Mar. 23 2011 at 4:14 pm
AbbyOliver6 BRONZE, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Every cloud has a silver lining" and "I don't get distracted easil-SQUIRREL!"

LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 19 2011 at 8:49 pm
AprilSunshine BRONZE, Irwin, Pennsylvania
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Oh my gosh... This story is amazing! I cried! Keep writing!

on Mar. 16 2011 at 7:28 pm
ColorMeScarlet BRONZE, Toms River, New Jersey
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I think your story is really nice, and I was drawn in with the summary. However, as soon as I started reading Chapter one, I had to stop. It was really choppy, turning me off to reading it completely.

But I think, if you lengthen your sentences, it would be even better.


on Mar. 11 2011 at 10:46 am
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
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I agree that you should work on the flow and the errors. It being in one of the tops spots, I thought I would be hooked more than I am. I really like your story, I just feel like I am not getting into it. Once you smooth out the choppiness, I am sure I will become more engaged.

on Feb. 20 2011 at 6:25 pm
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Oh yea and it's finished. lol.

on Feb. 18 2011 at 3:41 pm
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Yupp, I got lazy and decided to screw trying to make it perfect. It's the first book I ever wrote so w/e. Think what you may but My friends and family love it.

on Feb. 12 2011 at 7:06 pm
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Yea, thanks. I kind of hit a rough patch while writing but Im also trying to finish it. Because of the amount of comments I got concerning the typo's and punc. mistakes I wanted to go back and edit before publishing it.

on Feb. 11 2011 at 11:43 pm
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't leap you'lll never know what it's like to fly"

i enjoyed reading this! once i stared reading the firsr chapter i was hooked and did not stop reading!! i hope to see more chapers from you soon! your an amazing writier!!! :)

on Feb. 2 2011 at 7:36 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

You have a really great start here. It would be a lot easier to read if you edited it and worked on the grammar and flow; right now, it's a little choppy and the grammar problems sometimes detract from the story. Fix those things, and this story will go from good to awesome!

on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:24 pm
I am so in love with the charactes in this book. This was one of the first books I've found on here that I actually liked. You deserve that Number 1 spot for sure. Finish it and you never know, you might just make it. Btw, Congrats on doing such a great job. I would love to read some of your other stuff too.  Check out my work. But seriously, I love it, Juss saying .

on Jan. 29 2011 at 2:49 pm
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

I definantly am. I am working on a couple chapters at the moment.

on Jan. 29 2011 at 2:48 pm
PrincessSparkle GOLD, Flint, Michigan
11 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever said Nothings impossible clearly never tried to slam a rotating door.

Thanks for the tips and yeah, I've been working on better discripting things.

hrf1434 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 10:08 am
hrf1434 GOLD, Collierville, Tennessee
10 articles 4 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't Judge a Girl by Her Cover

please do, KEEP WRITING



hrf1434 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 10:06 am
hrf1434 GOLD, Collierville, Tennessee
10 articles 4 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't Judge a Girl by Her Cover

I love this story, please write more

 



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