Imperfection Is Beauty, Madness Is Genius

May 11, 2011
By Your_Beautiful_Lies SILVER, Cairo, New York
Your_Beautiful_Lies SILVER, Cairo, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Expirence is a brutal teacher, but we learn. My God do we learn."~C.S.Lewis








OR
What saves a man is to take a step. Then another step. It is always the same step, but you have to take it. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, Wind, Sand and Stars, 1939, translated from French by Lewis Galantière


Summary:

Spencer is reunited with an old friend, an old spark of love from High School. He was 12, she was 12. They fell in love and helped one another in a world so strange. Now they find themselves working side by side, falling in love all over again. But will Spencer Reid be able to hold on to her, or will she be lost in the storm?


Rebecca B.

Imperfection Is Beauty, Madness Is Genius


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on Jun. 7 2012 at 10:37 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
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Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

I love criminal minds!

on Dec. 26 2011 at 3:51 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

By the way, my twelve year old sister likes this.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 3:45 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Persona writing is a skilled art! Not just a mere skill or an abstract art but a skilled art! It's practically acting on paper! If done improperly the characterization drowns in a pool of nonsense! I beleive you saturated this story with romance! What is with this generation and romance?! Good grief! Why is Reid having kids? That seems so illogical. Why is there a second genius? That seems statistically impossible. Anyway, persona writing is an art, exactly like acting. There are beleivable actors (persay the ones on Criminal Minds) and there are horrible actors (poorly executed high school plays). Continue writing and always look at your word choice. :)

on Dec. 26 2011 at 3:11 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Interesting conclusion line. Please clarify if Reid and Chris have been captured along with Annabelle.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:48 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

EPITOME OF LAMENESS! TOO RANDOM! WHY WOULD THIS REALLY HAPPEN? IS THIS REALLY IN GIDEON'S CHARA -- Hold the hedgehog! Gideon already has a son! What is happening in this alternate multiverse?!?!

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:40 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

The Gideon segment should be in Reid's perspective.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:30 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

FAIL! I apologize for that out burst. Perhaps its just me and my anti-romantic sentiments, but ... Never mind

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:24 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Morgan would say, "Why do we love you?" Gideon and Reid seem out of character. Revise some diction.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:12 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Revise sentences to reduce redundancy. Remeber to revise your diction! Keep in mind that this is from the perspective of geniuses! Use the words to convince the reader of that! Why did you insert Gideon? Its not that we hate him, it is just too spontaneous.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 2:05 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

That old cliche 'back in high school.' Competion is characteristic of Reid but you might want to lok at some of your diction in chapter 5. FLASHBACK, FORESHADOWING, and IRONY abound! I love it!

on Dec. 26 2011 at 1:50 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Chapter 2: I like your portrayal of the stoic-faced Hotch, but the Prentiss comment seemed slightly out of character. I like your oxymoron of 'comfortable awkward silence.' This chapter reminds me of the first episode with Agent Seaver.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 1:37 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

Chapter 1: First person gives this story a unique twist. Your characters (especially Morgan) seem real (using dialogue). Perhpas you should have swithched chapters when swithching point of views. Focus on your diction/word choice -- this kind of persona wirting requires better diction since it comes from the minds of 'geniuses.' An interesting start.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 12:38 pm
AcrossTheUniverse BRONZE, Hondo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Go confidentally in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've always imagined." -Thoreau

I haven't had time to read your book yet, but your titile has hooked me. My friend would say something like that.


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