Hello, I've just finished the first chapter :) It's good, and I like the characters, but there are a few points were your writting needs work.

There are some parts where it's like you're typing too fast, or maybe because you keep changing the sentence, and the words are getting jumbled. Somtimes it gets confusing, and I have to reread the sentence to try and figure out what you meant to say. I think the first time is actually in the second sentence '...rocker looked was kind good...'. Maybe this problem is fixed in coming chapters, but I suggest you try reading over you're writting after you've finished, so you have a chance to correct.

The only other thing is: paragraphs. Because you don't start new paragraphs, it can become confusing as to what or who you're talking about (like the part when you were describing Elena and Alex), and I think it could be easily fixed by starting a new paragraph when the immediate topic changes.