HARRY POTTER CONTINUED

January 8, 2011
By TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"


Summary:

This starts right after the last page of the book but before the epilogue. This talks about all the things that happened in between them finishing Voldemort and then as adults. Included: How everyone gets married, the kids of course, and the fast-paced adventure of finding and capturing the remaining Death Eaters and followers.


Kristin S.

HARRY POTTER CONTINUED


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on Feb. 6 2011 at 8:57 pm
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

THANK YOU SO MUCH! You know...little comments like these seriously make my day. :)

on Feb. 5 2011 at 4:45 pm
KrazyButCool BRONZE, Laplace, Louisiana
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Girls are like phones. We love to be held, talked too but if you press the wrong button you'll be disconnected!

Very well written! I' not really into Harry Potter fan fiction,but this was amazingly done! Please write more I'm looking forward to it :)

on Feb. 4 2011 at 1:21 pm
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thank you so much for your help! I will take note of the changes. And don't worry! I wrote TONS more! Once again thank you for your help and enthusiasm. Keep posted for more if you'd like! :)

on Feb. 3 2011 at 8:15 pm
EllaMcFarley BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See ya later, Herc, it's been a real slice." -Megera from Hercules (my avatar!)
"I can't turn left!" -Zoolander
"Someone get these mother f***ing snakes off this mother f***ing plane!" -Samuel L. Jackson in Snakes On a Plane (funniest movie ever)

Blahghhelllagghh.... I'm going to die this makes me so happy!!!!!!!!!! Write more please :)

EDITS:

I'm confused about time at the start. You say that Harry is missing Ginny, who is away, but then he proposes to her? Then the Weasleys come back and he says he missed her? I thought he just proposed to her? Maybe stick the proposal paragraph in after the Weasleys come back, or provide explanation.

Also, the stuff about him having his scar not hurting for three years but then they're talking about events just after Voldemort's death as if it just happened? Just a tad confusing. Maybe just talk about the Phoenix and Azkaban as if it's more past tense. (it's only a problem in the first little part.)

Hope this helps!! Overall, I loooooved it, but I wanted to give you my two cents :)


on Jan. 27 2011 at 11:45 pm
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thank you! :)

lollypops GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2011 at 8:04 pm
lollypops GOLD, Pilot, Virginia
16 articles 5 photos 219 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live

anytime and keep writing you have much promise

on Jan. 27 2011 at 6:19 pm
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thanks! I will keep those suggestions in mind. Thank you for your help.

lollypops GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2011 at 2:45 pm
lollypops GOLD, Pilot, Virginia
16 articles 5 photos 219 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live

well Harry is usaully more extreme in his emotions and Hermonie tends to be a bit bossy and acts like is extremely smart (which she is) Ron is usually arguing with Hermoine and is a little cowardly he admires nice things since he is poor and has the worst luck sometimes

on Jan. 26 2011 at 10:00 pm
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Oh yeah, I know. Of course I won't publish this! :) can you tell me how to improve on my characters? Thanks so much! 

lollypops GOLD said...
on Jan. 26 2011 at 10:12 am
lollypops GOLD, Pilot, Virginia
16 articles 5 photos 219 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live

they just dont talk the way and act the way they did in the other books but that is mainly because you are not the orginal writer of harry potter because your writing style is just different then hers and just so you know this can not be published or you could be sued for playgerism *not sure if i spelt that right*

on Jan. 26 2011 at 12:51 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thanks so much for your comment! Please stay posted for more if you want. :)

on Jan. 26 2011 at 12:00 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Please tell me how my characters are off. Thanks!

lollypops GOLD said...
on Jan. 25 2011 at 7:53 pm
lollypops GOLD, Pilot, Virginia
16 articles 5 photos 219 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live

 agree this is really good alittle choppy and the charater were alittle off the sentences are choppy because they dont vary in length they are pretty much the same length

TARDISin221B said...
on Jan. 25 2011 at 7:13 pm
TARDISin221B,
0 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Merp

Awww, so romantic. It made me comment it out loud, that shows how much I liked it. I cant wait to see what else you planned. It's like a perfect fairytale.

on Jan. 18 2011 at 12:11 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thank you! Keep posted for more if you want to keep reading it! Please tell me how my sentences were choppy and I will try my best to fix it! Once again thanks!

on Jan. 18 2011 at 12:10 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Yes, it is.

on Jan. 18 2011 at 12:10 am
TeardropsInApril GOLD, Hillsborough, California
14 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"live, love, laugh!"

Thanks you so much! I will be SURE to change it. Sorry, I've been away skiing! So i couldn't post more. But, I will post more RIGHT AWAY! Thanks!

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 12:20 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

..is this some fan-fic..?

TuffGurl said...
on Jan. 14 2011 at 5:29 am

Sorry I meant prepositions... an example from your AMAZING piece is:

He had never been big on the romance stuff. But, he knew what Ginny was asking.

My tip: you should take out the period and replace it with a comma and take out the comma after the "but", as such:

He was never big on romance, but he knew what Ginny was asking.

See, much more flowy. That's my beef, but POST MORE RIGHT THIS INSTANT, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE I COULD GO ON FOREVER....


on Jan. 13 2011 at 8:21 pm
bahannahpeel PLATINUM, Bloomington, Illinois
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Schools corrupt the mind." The Loco Focos

I've wanted to write one of these for a while. It was good, a little choppy, and some words were repeated a lot. I don't think you got all the characters right, but how could you? Only Rowling knows how they really are.

I loved it.



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