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Empires at war

Empires at war
Summary: The acient greek and eqyptain fight

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ArchimedesWhite said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 6:53 pm

Hi, i'm the guy who wrote Pirates Vs. Vampires. One tip: your story goes too fast. In the first few paragraphs, he discovers his mothers name. And one more thing- I doubt Zeus would stutter in the face of his child. It would most likely be the other way around...

P.s. - I also wrote a greek story. Look for Omega...

Horrid_G said...
May 17, 2011 at 8:18 pm
please post constructive critism

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