Broken Souls

March 28, 2013
By Haden_Stein, goshen, Indiana
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!


Summary:

Nao wakes up in a room he doesnt recodnise, realising he cant actually remember anything, even his name. after meeting the residences owner and her daughter, he decides to stay with them until he finds a lead to find himself. in the days after, the kingdom, ruled by the "demon king" and bent on ruling the continent. in their attack the village in which hed been staying, he descovers not only a lead that could lead to who he was, but a mysterious power of his own.

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on Feb. 2 2014 at 9:01 pm
nakubara PLATINUM, Belvidere, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Everything you do in life is insignificant, but its important you do it anyway ~Ghandi

You are a great writer! Good job!

Haden_Stein said...
on May. 8 2013 at 6:19 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

i dont have a problem with it, i limit myself as i have been bored to tears with detail, even in really good stories

Kieth said...
on May. 8 2013 at 6:16 pm
Kieth, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Every day my momma told me to prey for a better life. Until the day my life ended. she she told me to prey harder, because it aint workin.

Well as a writer Detail is a very important element of any story. Draft or not its something i had trouble with detail when i began so i RPed. It helped a lot and i can now write detail without slowing the pace. You should try to better yourself, im lazy and i somehow pulled it off XD

Haden_Stein said...
on May. 8 2013 at 2:33 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

i tried not to go too much into detail for fear of slowing down the pace of the story, but in the final version (this is a rough draft) there will definately be more detail 

Kieth said...
on May. 8 2013 at 2:29 pm
Kieth, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Every day my momma told me to prey for a better life. Until the day my life ended. she she told me to prey harder, because it aint workin.

Deffinetly a facinating concept you have going here. Your pace of events ans story match the enviroment of the story, however i recommend a bit More detail and discription to make this really POP!   But i like it, i see great things in this. Keep it up!

on May. 6 2013 at 9:23 am
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

i really l-ike this-sunny

Haden_Stein said...
on Apr. 29 2013 at 12:11 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

hey guys, and girls and others and anyone else who ctually follows this thing, having some block on where i want to go from here so i cant promis the next release date, but ill try to get it out within the next three weeks

on Apr. 29 2013 at 12:05 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

luv it cant wait for the next chapter

on Apr. 23 2013 at 7:31 am
monkeymorgan BRONZE, Middlebury, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Fair means that everybody gets what they need and the only way to get what you need is to make that happen yourself." Rick Riordan

I love this story. Terriffice job Stein.

Haden_Stein said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 12:05 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

hello all, chapter four is well on its way in will be posted within the next week or two, check on fridays if the book is pending approval or if a new chapter has already been added

BlurAngel GOLD said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 9:21 am
BlurAngel GOLD, Bexleyheath, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Love is an Emotion of strong Affection and Personal Attachment.....

thank you  

Haden_Stein said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 9:01 am
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

ok, ill see what i can do but im really not one for poetry... but ill try anyway! :3

BlurAngel GOLD said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 8:16 am
BlurAngel GOLD, Bexleyheath, Other
16 articles 16 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is an Emotion of strong Affection and Personal Attachment.....

You could help by telling me what needs to be changed to make it better, but its still been reviewed but in the mean-time you can check out my poems and tell me what you think about them

on Apr. 8 2013 at 2:11 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors & sights of beauty in spite of having thorns

it was simply great

Haden_Stein said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 6:23 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

ill help any time but im not sure how i could...

Elizabeth156 said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 3:24 pm
Elizabeth156, Oklahoma City, Oklahoma
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it was a good book :)  

BlurAngel GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 2:41 pm
BlurAngel GOLD, Bexleyheath, Other
16 articles 16 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is an Emotion of strong Affection and Personal Attachment.....

Loved it,, its amazing, am also working on a novel and i think it would turn out well but i could need some help from you..

bbypeachy said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 1:37 am
bbypeachy, Victoria, Iowa
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I reaaaaaly loved this, omg nao is a demon, wow.

on Apr. 4 2013 at 2:53 am
WonderlovesChocolate BRONZE, Auckland, Other
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this is actually realy cool. i really liked reading it:) cool imagination!!:)

Haden_Stein said...
on Apr. 4 2013 at 2:42 am
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

chapter 4 on the way people! stay posted


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