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A Tropical Paradise

By Madison F., New City, NY
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Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
relaxation.
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.

This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Fia-fia said...
Jan. 18 at 7:58 pm:

This was well written, thank you. :)

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LUDACRIS said...
Jan. 18 at 2:04 pm:

i didnt like this book at all acually

Fia-fia replied...
Jan. 18 at 7:58 pm :

"LUDACRIS" could u at least give some feedback instead of bluntly and rudely saying you don't like this.

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LUDACRIS said...
Jan. 18 at 2:03 pm:

it was ok but i didnt like it

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youngspeare said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 8:15 am:

Well writing, I must say. The imagery is sharp. Please check out my poem"Ghosts of the Past". I would really appreciate your feedback. :)

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PriscillaSmiles said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:24 pm:

I love this. Describes just how i feel at the beach (: check out my work? thanks!

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Dreammer said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:09 pm:

Veary descriptive :p please read comment rate my work :P

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cottoncandy28 said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 2:08 pm:

Truth is, your a very good writter. And I liked how you wrote about the ocean. That's my favorite place to be. The way you described it, made it seem like I was at the beach, even though it's almost Winter. There is not one line that was not perfect. The poem really inspired me. And your a very good writer.

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SimpleGuy said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 9:04 pm:

I could lietrally hear the ocean in my ear, awesome imagery absolutely awesome imagery, you didn't leave a single thing out, stellar.

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purpleink said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 11:37 am:

I wish I was in a tropical paradise-i miss it. lol. love it!

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AllCaughtUp said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 10:06 pm:

This makes me with summer wasn't ending! Good job!

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aveawave said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 9:00 pm:

The last line is my favorite. :) Great Job! hey, would you mind checking out my work? Im new here, so Id like to get checked out and to be familiar with writers. Thanks!

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TotheSea said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:41 pm:

Great last line.

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Lola_Black said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:33 pm:

This totally makes me want to go on vacation! Nice writing : )

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Bambi67 said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:03 pm:

wow wish i was at the beach 2 lol... love it.. check out my writing thank =)

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emilybwrites said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 2:09 pm:

wow this was beautiful!!! please check out my poem "forgotten domain" and my new poem "the others" and comment/rate them thanks :)

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Mimi15 said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 7:53 pm:

This is really pretty! (: Check out some of my stuff.

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tajoines24 said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 10:28 pm:

this totally makes me want to go to the beach<3

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Book_addict said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 8:58 pm:

Makes me think of being on Paradise Island in the Bahamas. Well written =)

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HillaryJo said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 4:07 pm:

Very nice phrasing and details. I can see this beach that you are describing which keeps an audience captivated until your last word. Great work!

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joele12 said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 2:30 pm:

nice i'll love to go ther

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reblep said...
May 21, 2011 at 11:03 am:

can i go there? this is wonderful.

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KyleG said...
May 21, 2011 at 12:35 am:

Incredible. I'm there.

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Patryk. said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:29 am:

Great! I want to go to the beach now.

Karly R. replied...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:34 am :

Me and you shoud go to the beach this summer!!!! i lovee youuu pattae :)))))

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Dillinger123 said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:21 am:

Beautifully written. Makes me feel as though I am on a beach.

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KaitlynCallahan said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 8:13 pm:

beautifully written! it makes me want to be there.

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lala15 said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 5:25 pm:

beautifully written very descriptive--a want a tropical drink now!

TotheSea replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:47 pm :

Me too! Yum...tropical drinks. (:

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Lexi-pex said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 11:17 am:

this is so descriptive. i loved it! it made me feel like i was actually there

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swagmasterflex said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:17 pm:

the details made me feel like i was there

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1234567 said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:24 am:

I really think the picture is pretty , when you wrote this you could actually see the picture in your mind besides looking at it.

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Medina D. said...
Feb. 23, 2011 at 12:37 am:

this poem can pass as lyrics to a song!! Nice work!

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foxbox said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 9:36 pm:

Wow, such an enjoyable read!

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the_real_reggie_rocket said...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 7:43 am:

As I was reading this, it felt as if I was there with you. Great poem. I really enjoyed it.

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gman123 said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 9:15 am:

this is a very relaxing poem

alexwhite replied...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 12:50 am :

Vivid, soothing

TotheSea replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:48 pm :

Very soothing.

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SideraCaeli said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 4:40 pm:

This reminds me of when i went on vacation to hawaii.. awesome! Exactly how you described.

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teenpoet8 said...
Dec. 18, 2010 at 8:59 pm:

thats a wonderfully vivid poem! youre so good at descriptive writing. it was like i was there with you. legit. (:

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starlight26 said...
Dec. 18, 2010 at 12:55 pm:

Well you're hearing this from a miami girl. I LOVE THE BEACH. Great Job. I have also written several pieces about how much I love to visit the beach and how it makes me feel free. I have not posted them yet though. Anyway, I really liked this since I could relate. Check out some of my work if u can. thanks :)

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red-i13 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 7:27 pm:

Your poem makes me feel like I am living it. I love being on the beach. To bad I can't go cause of stupid snow.

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MRose911 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 12:41 am:

I felt like i was in your poem! Fabulous word choice! :)

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Jakethesnake said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 7:13 pm:

This is awesome, my friend! So glad I found this website! I've been looking for something to read for a while now!

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TheMusicalFaery said...
Oct. 27, 2010 at 3:15 pm:

Beautiful! I love the ocean, and this poem captured the essence of a lazy day at the beach. :) Nice job- keep up the good work!

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vnj6607 said...
Oct. 26, 2010 at 2:18 pm:

Reading this totally made me want to take a cruise or something. I think I'm going to go home and talk to my mom about a possible vacation. The mood is relaxing. Gosh, I'm so desperate to be on a beach not.

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Soccer33 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 7:13 pm:

that was cool. i liked how you brought me ino the stort at the begining.

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squalur996 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 5:30 pm:

What really got me was the coconut for some reason, and that it didn't rhyme. It all came together nicely.

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Lil_Riss said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 5:21 pm:

WOW!!!! This is amazing and way better than my trip to the beach. I got a very bad burn, lost the room key, and then hug out with some friends at the pool where i scraped my foot.

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GreenLover said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:20 am:

LOVED IT! that was so nicely written i give you a 5 star. i made me feel like i was there. i like poems that rhyme or have some sort of flow too it and yours does. nicee work look forward to reading more of your work :)

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