Home Alone MAG

By Ashlyn Zacarelli, Clinton, CT

The sky was pitch black, the house was creaking, and I still had four hours until my parents got home. Locked in my parents’ room, I turned on the TV full blast so I wouldn’t hear the creaking house.

I barely heard the phone ring. I picked it up and said, “Hello … hello …?” but there was no response. I knew someone was on the other end. Finally, I hung up. A minute later, the phone rang again; still no one was there. I became more frightened as time passed; the same ­person called five more times.

At this point I didn’t bother picking up, but the ringing continued. To get my mind off this prank caller, I called my friend. She told me not to worry and to turn the phone off. As we talked, I heard someone pull into the driveway. When I peeked out the window, I saw an unfamiliar car.

Thirty minutes passed and the car was still in my driveway. It drove up and down the drive as if aware I was watching. My friend told me to call the cops, but I refused.

Soon the phone calls started again. I heard noises in the background, but I couldn’t tell what they were. I really didn’t want that person to get out of the car and start toward the house. If they did, I didn’t know what I’d do. None of the doors were locked, and I would have no way of protecting myself. The only thing I could do was hide, which wasn’t a very good plan.

At this point I was considering calling the cops, but my friend offered to drive by. “Maybe if they see me pull in, they will leave,” she suggested. By the time she arrived, the car had left. The phone rang again and I picked up, thinking it might be my friend. Someone on the other end said “Bye-bye.”

At that point I wasn’t as scared as curious. Since then I have not stayed home alone and I probably never will.



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on Oct. 24 2011 at 10:27 pm
TheWriterGolfer BRONZE, Arcadia, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life is merely a shell. It's what you do with it that cracks it.

That was really suspensful. I was literally at the edge of seat while reading this piece. You sure know how to attract an audience!

on Oct. 24 2011 at 1:16 pm
Rocinante SILVER, Wexford, Pennsylvania
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Oh my gosh I would've been soooo scared and creeped out...

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on Oct. 23 2011 at 6:41 pm
Loftus GOLD, Ocoee, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own, and you know what you know. And you are the one who'll decide where you'll go." -Dr. Seuss

Oh my! I would have been so scared! This totally gave me chills and I'm amazed that this was more of a thriller to me than the books I've read! Great job recreating the suspense.

zee11 said...
on Oct. 23 2011 at 10:51 am
zee11, Kandy, Other
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gosh!i would have been so freaked out if it was me...by the way,you've got great writing skill ..:)

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on Oct. 22 2011 at 3:11 pm
-Duckie- GOLD, West Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Your heart is a weapon the size of your fist. Keep fighting. Keep loving.
-Anonymous

Wow! gave me chills! great writing, don't stop!

TenshiNoYami said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 11:14 pm

Wow, real mature, STALKA's.

But to answer the actual story: I'm really glad you're ok! Seriously, I would've freaked out. Not to sound like a nagging mom, but you should've considered calling the police instead...I'm just glad no-one got out of the car, with a gun, and decided to shoot you!


on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:38 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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Hey! I'm just glad she's safe. It does not need about the ending. I mean what if she gotten in real danger? Seriously, thinking about the ending is the last thing I would do when someone is in my driveway.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:33 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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I was really creeped out by this article, I'm not homw alone... but the thought of unkown someone about to enter my house, the thought of it is terrifying.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:28 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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Oh my god! That's scary, if it was me, I would start crying and scream or possibly call my parents.

 


on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:23 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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I would have make sure to think up an escape plan in case or scream at them (probs not). The truth, I would have ran and call the police, (I don't think so 'cause I'm a chicken.

 


on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:18 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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I meant what if it didn't turned out like this ending.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:17 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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Dude, this was really dangerous! What if it turned out like this ending? Banish that thought away. Anyway, I'm glad you're safe. This writing is good, it built up suspense and I couldn't stop reading it.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 2:47 pm
ThePeaceDaisy BRONZE, Albany, New York
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“Laundry is the only thing that should be separated by color.” - Unknown
I will change this every week!

Wow, that freaked ME out, and it didn't happen to me! I think I understand why you didn't call the cops. Maybe you were afraid if the person found out, they would try to get revenge? Anyway, Great writing!

on Oct. 21 2011 at 8:51 am
LMAO...outside yo window, watchin youz.

on Oct. 17 2011 at 8:49 pm
keziahseverything BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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good things come to those who wait

why didnt you call the cops that could have been seriously dangerous

on Oct. 13 2011 at 11:12 am
zebras13 BRONZE, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Live every day like its your last.

I love this!!

trelly-trell said...
on Oct. 13 2011 at 10:09 am

this story was alright ,it was kinda creepy but i like it!!!!!!!!!

 


on Oct. 11 2011 at 5:53 pm
gottagetout17 SILVER, Carlisle, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"No matter what anybody tells you words and ideas can change the world" ~Dead Poets Society

wow seriously creepy!

C Swaqq said...
on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:26 pm
Woa , This was the best ! I was creeped. It makes me re-think about staying home alone to ! :]

on Oct. 10 2011 at 4:26 pm
I really liked this! That is a very scary situation. You should be more cautious and not be so against calling for help! Keep up the writing:)


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