Home Alone MAG

By Ashlyn Zacarelli, Clinton, CT

The sky was pitch black, the house was creaking, and I still had four hours until my parents got home. Locked in my parents’ room, I turned on the TV full blast so I wouldn’t hear the creaking house.

I barely heard the phone ring. I picked it up and said, “Hello … hello …?” but there was no response. I knew someone was on the other end. Finally, I hung up. A minute later, the phone rang again; still no one was there. I became more frightened as time passed; the same ­person called five more times.

At this point I didn’t bother picking up, but the ringing continued. To get my mind off this prank caller, I called my friend. She told me not to worry and to turn the phone off. As we talked, I heard someone pull into the driveway. When I peeked out the window, I saw an unfamiliar car.

Thirty minutes passed and the car was still in my driveway. It drove up and down the drive as if aware I was watching. My friend told me to call the cops, but I refused.

Soon the phone calls started again. I heard noises in the background, but I couldn’t tell what they were. I really didn’t want that person to get out of the car and start toward the house. If they did, I didn’t know what I’d do. None of the doors were locked, and I would have no way of protecting myself. The only thing I could do was hide, which wasn’t a very good plan.

At this point I was considering calling the cops, but my friend offered to drive by. “Maybe if they see me pull in, they will leave,” she suggested. By the time she arrived, the car had left. The phone rang again and I picked up, thinking it might be my friend. Someone on the other end said “Bye-bye.”

At that point I wasn’t as scared as curious. Since then I have not stayed home alone and I probably never will.



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on Feb. 16 2010 at 2:53 pm
i have to agree with ashlen. the beginning was definitently a well descripive grabber.

Ashlen BRONZE said...
on Feb. 12 2010 at 7:25 pm
Ashlen BRONZE, Gibsonville, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
your boyfriend likes you but i'm his favorite
i don't do mornings
hey yall!, was up?

This is a really good story I would love to know more about what happened I couldn't stop reading once I started

phoenix1237 said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 3:26 pm
your friend is a great friend for offering to drive by but that could have resulted in her getting hurt. if this ever happens again (which is extremely unlikely) you should call the police. also next time lock the doors. however, i don't think never staying home alone is the answer... or practical. what are you going to do when you get older? try working your way up to staying home alone. start for just say 5 or ten minutes while your parents take down the trash. next time go 15 or twenty minutes, then 1/2 and hour, and hour... etc. you can always call a friend if you need something to occupy you, or watch a funny tv show. remember to keep the doors locked. anywaz, the piece was very well written

zobean GOLD said...
on Jan. 14 2010 at 5:30 pm
zobean GOLD, Northfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"A Good player inspires themselves. A GREAT player inspires others."

OMG! This is so good, i totally want to know who that was. This story really draws you in, even if it is a really scary experience.

on Jan. 8 2010 at 4:07 pm
FanficFanatic, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes the kindest hearts can lie behind the plainest faces. Adopt a shelter animal and find a forever friend." "Michael Jackson and Obama are not heroes. You want to see a hero? The people who fight so you can read your tabloids are. Soldiers."

Why didn't you have the doors locked?

on Dec. 26 2009 at 5:30 pm
Adrenalinejunkie52 SILVER, Sweet Home, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
geez louise!
Hot Dang!!
Wasshupp?!!? (wuh-shup)
Hey You!

That's a really good story! What happens when the parents get home and stuff though? Please write more?! You got me hooked!

zoeee BRONZE said...
on Dec. 25 2009 at 12:54 pm
zoeee BRONZE, ?, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
if you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it doesn't, then it was never meant to be. - Shakespeare

wow. i like this story.

400king BRONZE said...
on Dec. 21 2009 at 12:49 pm
400king BRONZE, Hemet, California
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Favorite Quote:
a poem is never finished, just abandoned

i like the story but the ending just ruins it. after all that someone calls and say bye-bye and it only makes you curious? i'd be sleeping with a bat that night, nut then again i wouldn't have sat there in my house while a mysterious car sat in my driveway for 30 minutes. haha.

on Dec. 8 2009 at 11:44 am
thesilverrose BRONZE, Richardson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Three may keep a secret, if two of them are dead." -Benjamin Franklin

If you looked into the driveway and saw the car you should have written down the licence plate numbers and letters in their orders then called the cops. If the car had left when the cops arrived you could hand them the licence plate numbers and letters that you copied down and they could keep a watch for the car. :D

auna123 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 22 2009 at 10:18 pm
auna123 BRONZE, Bethel, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Education is what survives when what has been learnt has been forgotten." B.F. skinner

creepy story but well written lol

Sunshineyday said...
on Nov. 21 2009 at 3:35 pm
should have called the police. weird. I'd be scared to be alone too. of course you can use my strategy and arm yourself with a bat, a phone in the pocket (to call police), and some type of sharp instrument-LOL but then you'd have to be ready for a fight. it was most likely pranksters and you shouldn't be that worried.

LambyLauren said...
on Nov. 12 2009 at 9:14 pm
omg u shouod have written the end!!

once i started reading this,i knew that this would be good. and it was freaky too. i feel what you mean. can you please add more?

on Nov. 8 2009 at 4:13 pm
CaseyLeigh PLATINUM, Moraga, California
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Creepyyyyyy.

jorden501 said...
on Sep. 4 2009 at 9:08 pm
omg i luv ur story but canu pleassssssssseeeeee add more bec i didnt want it 2 end

millz SILVER said...
on May. 20 2009 at 7:02 pm
millz SILVER, Memphis, Tennessee
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WOW that would have freaked me out. ending could have been better

on May. 2 2009 at 4:41 pm
daisydee123 SILVER, Gotham City, Illinois
5 articles 19 photos 66 comments
wow impressive.

XOXJessXOX said...
on Apr. 6 2009 at 9:56 pm
Wow this is just like the scary story. Atleast change it round and add stuff in to make it actually seem tur.

on Apr. 4 2009 at 8:18 pm
Vindictive_Love BRONZE, Abq, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Talent wins games, but teamwork and intelligence wins championships.
Michael Jordan

Whatever you do in life, will be insignificant, but it's very important that you do it.
Mahatma Ghandi

okay wow i loved it.... but the ending just really didn't fit i mean you shoudve kept on going cuz i was getting so into it

kati said...
on Feb. 5 2009 at 11:19 pm
i liked that.that woulda freaked me out

fabskiner132 said...
on Jan. 27 2009 at 7:20 pm
what a creeper it was scary not really


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