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The sky was pitch black, the house was creaking, and I still had four hours until my parents got home. Locked in my parents’ room, I turned on the TV full blast so I wouldn’t hear the creaking house.

I barely heard the phone ring. I picked it up and said, “Hello … hello …?” but there was no response. I knew someone was on the other end. Finally, I hung up. A minute later, the phone rang again; still no one was there. I became more frightened as time passed; the same ­person called five more times.

At this point I didn’t bother picking up, but the ringing continued. To get my mind off this prank caller, I called my friend. She told me not to worry and to turn the phone off. As we talked, I heard someone pull into the driveway. When I peeked out the window, I saw an unfamiliar car.

Thirty minutes passed and the car was still in my driveway. It drove up and down the drive as if aware I was watching. My friend told me to call the cops, but I refused.

Soon the phone calls started again. I heard noises in the background, but I couldn’t tell what they were. I really didn’t want that person to get out of the car and start toward the house. If they did, I didn’t know what I’d do. None of the doors were locked, and I would have no way of protecting myself. The only thing I could do was hide, which wasn’t a very good plan.

At this point I was considering calling the cops, but my friend offered to drive by. “Maybe if they see me pull in, they will leave,” she suggested. By the time she arrived, the car had left. The phone rang again and I picked up, thinking it might be my friend. Someone on the other end said “Bye-bye.”

At that point I wasn’t as scared as curious. Since then I have not stayed home alone and I probably never will.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Kiiiidii. said...
Oct. 27, 2010 at 3:00 pm
I think that your way of telling the story was good, good grammar. But i think it was kinda lame, cause i mean, all you had to do was lock the doors. not hide. Sooo yeah, and this happends to anyone. Just sayin!
AaronLawrence replied...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 9:32 pm
The point is its nonfiction so its true, he had no 'choice' in stories. 
-DreamForever- replied...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 7:10 pm
I get that, but no one ever said he had to write a story on that particular subject. 
Miss_Bliss replied...
Jan. 30, 2011 at 1:13 pm
I actually thought that it was an incredibly good subject for a story (mysterious prank caller, unknown car idling outside your house, your doors are unlocked...). However, I wholeheartedly agree with LastChapter and -DreamForever-. You can milk a story without taking away the truth in it, and I think it would have been a good idea to try and enhance the suspense (with that in mind).
Miss_Bliss replied...
Jan. 30, 2011 at 1:17 pm
Oh, I mean I agree with -DreamForever- that it ended too abruptly, not that it was bad subject material.
pandiibearr said...
Oct. 18, 2010 at 12:33 pm
this was a very creepy storyy but i likeedd it.(: 
thestorycritic said...
Oct. 16, 2010 at 12:36 pm
Wow. That was scary *shudder*
Happyface:) said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 5:38 pm
Well written! This was gripping and I was curious about what your curiosity is, but you didn't say it.
Britt:) said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 2:22 pm
Your story was intresting! Kept my occupied! Intense. I just wanted to keep reading but it ended!
jennahater442 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 2:20 pm
It was really suspenseful and you had great sentence fluency.
Cookiemonsta555 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 2:20 pm
Wow very scary story!
chunkychucky said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 2:17 pm
Very suspensful story. I freaked out when a spider was on me i cant imagine this.
chucky6 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 2:00 pm
This was scary. How could she not call the cops! I am afraid of being home alone too.
scbylvr said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 11:12 am
Thier are several miss spelled words but it sounds like u were really scared. I have been in a sitiation like that but worse.
burritosareawesome said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 11:10 am
I really enjoyed your story! Very powerful writing! It persuaded me to take caution when I am home alone again at night. I love the description you put into this.
wtetfy74 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 11:07 am
That sounds like a very scary exprience but you should still try be home alone for a little bit
FuzzyWuzzyHadNoHair said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:56 am

Moi muy muy enjoyed your write. Maybe you can writo better next time. Not scary enough! This happens to almost everyone. Just buy some locks and a bb gun!! seriously!

Moi Out!!!

Nukebomb said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:51 am
That is scary. I can't really relate but i have been home alone and it was very scary.
Carmal23 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:20 am
 I can relate to it a lot because that is exactly what i do when I am home alone! I hate that feeling and you described it very well, nice job!
Keyshawn The Egg said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:20 am
This story has scared me for life! I am never staying home alone at night again. Very powerful writing!
micheal vick said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:18 am
This story creaped me out im sorry you had to go through that. Your story was great kept mewanting more
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