Message From Your Daughter

March 26, 2013
By Jewish-Latina95 SILVER, West Des Moines, Iowa
Jewish-Latina95 SILVER, West Des Moines, Iowa
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love can last forever...if ur love urself first.

Her face was pressed against the glass, small hands waving as big brown eyes filled with tears. You were standing at the end of the driveway with Mama, hugging her and kissing her as tears fill her eyes too. Carlos stood with the both of you, holding your bag in his hands.

After releasing Mama from your embrace, you turned to Carlos, Daddy, placing a hand on his shoulder. Mama's blue eyes look up at you still, but its owner is trying to be a strong boy. Tears brim those eyes as well, a few rolling down the ten year old's face. "Be strong, my son. Your mother and sister need you to be strong. You’re the man of the house now."

"I promise," was all he said to you.

Just as you were about to enter Abuelo’s waiting car, your little girl raced from her place in the window. Her little feet stomped the ground fiercely as she ran to say goodbye. And when you took her in your arms, tears stained your daughter’s cheeks as you kissed her head full of curls.

Through breathy words and sobs, she made you promise you’d come back. That you’d be there for her 6th birthday and never forget the family you would leave behind. Her arms were wrapped tight around your neck as she did. But the tone in her soft voice, full of naivety and innocence, told of something that was soon to come; as she said to you “goodbye”.

You clutched her head delicately, bringing it to your lips. “There is no need for that, no need to say goodbye. I’ll always be with you, I will always remember you. Just remember that I love you.”

You gave her one last kiss before setting her on the ground and took your bag in tow. She grabbed hold of your free hand after you open the door, tears still running down her face. “You promise, Daddy?”

“I promise, Jessie.”

Little hands slipped from your warm, firm ones as you entered the car. The same little hands you held since the day she was born, that longed to hold yours again when she needed you.

But as the car pulled away, and you heard her cries calling out for you not to leave, another set of hands filled your spot. They took your little girl in the owner’s arms and carried her from the edge of the driveway. They dried the tears she cried, after you left, and would cry while you were gone. Taking to their new role, her big brother picked up where you left off.

In spite of that, during the years after that day, they expressed a love that a father could only give. After you were pronounced dead, by then, she sensed no difference between the two. Both guided and guarded her, picked her up when she was down. He cradled her even until the pain had gone away.

She sensed no difference because her brother never let her forget about you. He always reminded her of the love you had for your family and did the job he promised you he’d do. You never faded from her memory. Like you said once, you’d always be with her. You’re just with her now, through the son who looked to you as a hero.

The author's comments:
This was based on the last day i saw my father alive, before he went off to fight in Afghanistan.

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This article has 9 comments.

on Jun. 2 2014 at 1:05 pm
Sherlocklives SILVER, Mnt. Marion, New York
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"I may be on the side of the angels, but don't think for one second that I *am* one of them." ~Sherlock

I cried :'( it was really good

on Jun. 2 2014 at 12:49 pm
nikkifuentes BRONZE, Wimauma, Florida
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“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.” _

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it was sad i love it and it made me cry

on Jun. 5 2013 at 10:07 am
Sarah_Rose17 SILVER, Windsor, Colorado
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"Remember to trust others, it will one day be your saving grace."

The emotion you write with is absolutely moving. The story never got boring and held my attention start to finish. You have amazing talent.

on May. 21 2013 at 3:23 pm
AvianNudge SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Jess ur amazing, and u make me feel so special, and this is amazing. The true feeling of life. I love u 

on Apr. 12 2013 at 12:51 pm
Tabitha1233 PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
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wow! Talk about a tear jerker! Very good!

on Apr. 11 2013 at 1:08 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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i luv it Princess

on Apr. 4 2013 at 9:07 am
Redhead_Squishy BRONZE, West Des Moines, Iowa
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So beautiful, Sissy. Your father would be so proud.

on Apr. 3 2013 at 4:24 pm
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein

Amazing work!

on Apr. 3 2013 at 3:55 pm
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
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Wow..its so full of emotions! Its well phrased..and I love it. I look forward to reading more of your stuff! <3 Good luck.


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