Take Back the Redemption

June 24, 2009
By whammy BRONZE, Place, Illinois
whammy BRONZE, Place, Illinois
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I have spent most of my life surrounded by people, but always alone. I am the watchman that is never repaid. Without me to blame or to help rescue my family would not survive. I am the strongest when they are need, but the weakest at heart. My heart beats as one. My family, my friends, my acquaintances they all beat within my heart. As each one dies or leaves my life, my heart skips a beat that it can never recover from. God save me from evil and save me from hurt for all those I have wronged I hope I can be forgiven. For if I am not forgiven, my life is forever shamed.

I walk with the dead, and laugh with the mortal. I drink tea with strangers and dance with the forgotten. I am forever unpaid. My life is a soap that is never cancelled. There is no present, only a future, but all I want is the past. When my eyes where still a virgin and my words were still unhurtful.

My road is one way.


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on Dec. 17 2010 at 11:10 pm
sweetly_broken GOLD, Garner, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
We never know how big we are until we are asked to rise.

oh, okay. well i would maybe talk a little bit about brokenness, and then lead into how your family fell apart.

whammy BRONZE said...
on Dec. 17 2010 at 8:54 pm
whammy BRONZE, Place, Illinois
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Thank you!

whammy BRONZE said...
on Dec. 17 2010 at 8:54 pm
whammy BRONZE, Place, Illinois
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I can't actually pin point an exact memory this piece was based on. Mostly just a collection of when my parents divorced and my family (parents and siblings) fell apart. 

Leann14 GOLD said...
on Dec. 16 2010 at 6:41 pm
Leann14 GOLD, DeGraff, Ohio
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A beautiful, raw piece. I enjoyed it:)

on Dec. 16 2010 at 6:38 pm
sweetly_broken GOLD, Garner, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
We never know how big we are until we are asked to rise.

i really, really like the beginning. i might be able to help you more if i knew which memory the piece was based on???

whammy BRONZE said...
on Jun. 29 2010 at 12:00 pm
whammy BRONZE, Place, Illinois
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After I wrote this and posted it, I got stuck on how to keep going on it. Any suggestions?

on Jun. 26 2010 at 2:14 pm
aMANDA365 BRONZE, Versailles, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
1.No one can make you feel inferior without your consent
- Eleanor Roosevelt
2.I'll get there alive even if it kills me!
- Homer Simpson
3.It's okay to be crazy, but don't be insane.
- P Diddy

so this is the start of a story or is it about  you personally?




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