Long Conversations

July 28, 2012
By marchbutterfly GOLD, Orange, New Jersey
marchbutterfly GOLD, Orange, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"When you play God, you get screwed."


Tia

(January 15, 2012 at approximately 6:30pm in the afternoon, a text conversation between my friend Tia and I takes place. Tia is a 17-year-old girl in her senior year of high school. She appears to be quiet to anyone who doesn’t know her but around her friends she is very talkative. She is creative, an artist, if you want to call her that. She’s funny, sarcastic, blunt, at times, and seems to have aspirations to become a tyrannical dictator.)


This is definitely more fun than watching the football game.
Your questions make a lot more sense than football.
They’re more straightforward.

I like talking to you.
It’s fun talking to you.
Our conversations are rarely ever serious.
You can definitely keep a conversation going,
Which is good because I suck at that.
But honestly you do talk about yourself a lot and you know that.
But you’re not snobbish about it.
Even though you are pretty confident.

You’re loud, very loud.
It reminds me a lot of home,
and that not a good thing.
But you know you’re loud.
You know people can hear you and you don’t seem to care.

I think that’s what I like most about you.
You are very talkative.
Which is something I’m not,
Except when I’m around people like you.
People who make me want to talk,
people who I don’t hate.



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CammyS SILVER said...
on Dec. 23 2012 at 8:06 am
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

This was pretty good. I'm a little confused as to who is talking when. Is is all Tia, or do you switch off. Iff the latter, who talks when? In any event, this piece is very poetic and beautiful. My only other critisism is the beginning when you describe Tia is a little... off. I might suggest breaking it up into little seperate chunks, like this. This is definitely more fun than watching the football game. Your questions make a lot more sense than football. They're more straightforward. Oh, Tia. I chuckle to myself. She's so.... different than everybody else. More funny. More creative. I'm glad she's my friend.   You might have a better idea, but I think that just shoving all the info on Tia into () at the beginning is not the way to go. I hope this helps!


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