an after dinner conversation between my younger brother and dad

April 7, 2009
By Martha Hoffman BRONZE, Lincoln, Massachusetts
Martha Hoffman BRONZE, Lincoln, Massachusetts
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In the pink panther the one where they’re o n that island and his tummy is like right here and Martha I want to move that water away from that two thousand dollar computer I wish that there was a mini laptop that you could get aren’t laptops expensive too? Yes I was quoting the expenses for laptops. I wonder how many laptops we have in this house about eight thousand? Oh much more the table cost five hundred dollars, the chair cost one hundred dollars just like the universe just like the universe that’s right.

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Joanna said...
on Sep. 25 2009 at 3:16 pm
Joanna, St. Catharines, Other
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No, I don't agree with you alecthegreat3. I think you missed the whole point of it. The article is a recorded conversation of a little boy speaking. The run on sentence is emphasizing the way children speak with so much excitement.

I like it a lot, especially the way you ended it, with the universe. It's cute!

on May. 28 2009 at 8:29 pm
You seem to have many run-on sentences. You really need to work on your sentence structure, grammar, and sentence organization.


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