Temptation

April 19, 2013
By Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!


I met you in Algebra II and you said I was pretty. You wouldn’t introduce me to your friends but I didn’t mind for long. You would call me day and night, tell me sweet nothing, and I believed you. They were empty words and old lies you told other girls too.

You acted as if I was your world, when all you gave me is nothing. You would not speak to me when I tried to talk to you in front of your friends. When other eyes were watching, you acted as if you couldn’t see me, as if I was invisible.

It broke my heart to pull myself away you. You were my world, my destiny, my love. But I guess I wasn’t yours. You were just simply using me; like a marionette. I let you control me; I let you make me believe in your deceit.
I should’ve known you were trouble; I guess a little part of me always knew, but the idea of being with you was just so tempting, I hid from the truth like a coward.
You were too good for me. I think you forgot about me two minutes after I called to let you know we were done. I cried all day, as I imagined you laughing with another girl. I wasn’t, somehow, too surprised when my imagination became reality.
I kept telling myself, you were a waste of time. An inner part of me protested so much.
Temptation. I didn’t know the full blast of it. There was this cord, pulling me toward you. Why couldn’t we just mind our own business? Why we couldn’t I keep my distance?
Why couldn’t you just leave me alone? What did you ever want from me? Too many questions, but no answers.
My best friend tells me how he cares about her. I know if I tell her what happened to me when I was with him, and what he did to me, it would be utterly useless. Because if I tried to tell her, or anybody in particular, they wouldn’t listen to me and convince themselves that he had changed when he really hadn’t changed a bit. Girls were just poor victims of temptation.

I admit, I never really got over you. I fell in love, got married, and eventually moved on with our memory shoved away in a corner of my mind. I never dared to talk about you to my loved one. A woman’s heart is an ocean full of secrets. Even now I still see you standing over me.
You were so cruel, so utterly selfish. Your memory always lingers in mine.
Why is it so hard to forget you?
Here I am, with my grandchildren in the backyard. Here I am, admitting that a little part of me still wants you, still needs you. Here I am, loving you after all these years.
I guess I could never get over you.


The author's comments:
I want people to recognize themselves in my article. The dam of emotions bursted, and the emotions flooded out.

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Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Dec. 28 2013 at 11:32 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you!

on Dec. 28 2013 at 11:25 am
SurabiT. BRONZE, Plano, Texas
1 article 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Standards don’t define me. I don't live to meet the credential established by a mad man, I am a treasure whether you want to believe it or not.

Great work!

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Dec. 27 2013 at 12:53 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

All your comments inspire me to write more! If it wasn't for me sis . (Tanaz) I never would've continued typing! Thank you all for your comments, because it always motivates me.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2013 at 5:34 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you so much! I appreciate it!

on Nov. 14 2013 at 8:07 am
ChristianGuild GOLD, Grand Ledge, Michigan
17 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Perception is reality.

The ending had caught me with surprise! I enjoyed how little detail there was, just enough to let one's imagination take flight. Again, you are a great writer! Keep it up :)

on Oct. 26 2013 at 12:19 pm
The_Capricornian GOLD, Marietta, Georgia
12 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed. - Ernest Hemingway

This is a nice little piece of work with meaning you have witten here.  I like how it is written so it doesn't need flowerly language to solidify it.  In fact, I think that if you did do so, it wouldn't accurately display unfiltered emotions like the story shows.

on Oct. 20 2013 at 10:30 am
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

It's a nice little story. I saw a few grammar errors but nothing major. I liked the premise of the story and it's relatable to girls (or even guys) who have been in a relationship like this. Normally I would say this needed imagery hut it almost works without it. The vague words and storyline is like you're in her head. You don't need to know anything else. Well done.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Jun. 9 2013 at 2:37 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you, everybody!!!!!!! You just made a girl really happy by just commenting!!!

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on May. 29 2013 at 6:00 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Oh ha ha Tanaz, very funny (not!) but i'm glad you commented........ i hate you! Bye!

on May. 24 2013 at 3:30 am
TanazMasaba GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 10 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You've gotta dance like there's nobody watching,
Love like you'll never be hurt,
Sing like there's nobody listening,
And live like it's Heaven on Earth."













---William W. Purkey

Its a well written piece but I expect more from you. Not because you're aweful or anything (which you are not). But because I want you to be better than you are. Besides, you still didn't beat me yet.

on May. 22 2013 at 9:15 am
Kittycatdancer15 BRONZE, Temecula, California
4 articles 1 photo 20 comments

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I was Born from a Boom-Box

wow very touching. very well written keep up the work.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on May. 20 2013 at 8:33 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you!

HammadWaseem said...
on May. 20 2013 at 8:27 am
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
0 articles 6 photos 287 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.
-Eminem

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!
-Mask

nice!!keep it up.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on May. 18 2013 at 10:13 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you, Cookie!!!!!!!!!!!!

on May. 18 2013 at 9:57 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 149 comments
Wow.. This is SO good! It should be in the magazine! I loved it. keep it up...

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on May. 18 2013 at 9:46 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Thank you sooo much!!!!!!!!! :)

kabir23 said...
on May. 11 2013 at 7:46 am
its very touching..........n im proud of you...im out of words.........


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