A true story: part 1

January 9, 2009
My hands flew to my head, bringing me to my knees in front of the bathroom stall. I couldn'y control my shaking as the pain my chest, sweat streaming down my face and breaths comming to me in hoarse gasps. I tryed to stand up grabbing the sink to steady myself. my heart scorched as the room started to spin, the world shrouded in a red mist as the ground rushed up to meet me. I woke up and my fist tightened around the cold flute in my hand as i struggled to haul myself back to class. I asked for a nurses pass, declining the offer of an escort as he noticed how long i had been in the bathroom. I couldn't tell anyone what had happened, for the fear of seeming weak like i had always felt. Before i knew it i was standing at the enterance to the nurses office, looking at the sign on the door. I walked in explaining what i had been feeling but conviently leaving out what had happened. I sat down for a while not able to eat or drink anything, my pulse had slowed as she checked it, timing it with her watch. I grabbed the pass slowly walking back to class now egar to get back to the band room knowing that they would notice how hard i was breathing, but he didn't, he just took the pass and continued listening to the band play proud spirit. I sat down relieved that he didn't ask any questions, but my friends on the other hand couldn't help but ask a million and one questions........TO BE CONTINUED IN PART 2

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aphilly said...
Nov. 29, 2010 at 7:47 pm

Can't wait for part 2! i'm uber eager to read what happens


michaeljacksonlover replied...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 6:27 pm
part two is already up
Shelly.B This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 7, 2010 at 4:55 pm
ok, so im kinda' new to teen ink but i just wanted to let you know that a piece of your work you posted on the forums inspired me to write a poem...here it is if you wanna read it...thanks for being inspirational :)
Waking up to breath these gleaming lights,
you’re all the darkness I ever asked for.
Now time will never be slow enough,
and I won’t be able to hold you again.
Take me back to where the water spoke in waves
too gentle to s... (more »)
Jatavion said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 6:36 pm
That was pretty well written, but it left a lot of questions in my mind. I still don't understand what happened exactly. I don't know, it may be just me missing something important or obvious.
sykitty replied...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 6:39 pm
thx jatavion, and no ur not missing anything ive submitted parts 2 and 3 but there still pending approval so i think those will answer alot of the questions
Kaitbryn said...
Jan. 9, 2010 at 11:48 pm
Very good use of adjetivs. I play the flute also! A Good start to a story, very much a narrative hook. Would love to see how you use it to further your story!
sxykitty said...
Apr. 5, 2009 at 9:11 pm
if u have any more questions or comments email me at cheetahgrlhek@gmail.com
wickedgirl95 said...
Jan. 24, 2009 at 4:30 pm
YAY!!!! I loved it!!! Are you going to submit the whole thing?!?!?!
angeldemon said...
Jan. 24, 2009 at 7:59 pm
hey...hannah! that was gr8! i loved it and plz send part 2, i cannot wait to read more only i hope that no more of this happened to you because that seems like a frightening and very sucky day! love, H.D.
p.s. u rock!
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