Nathaniel's Menu MAG

August 16, 2011
By PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."


On orientation day at the hospital, they asked new volunteers which department we would like to work in. I could choose to be a swimming coach, dietary assistant, or an occupational therapy assistant. Knowing full well that I would grow attached to children who would eventually leave, I decided to start off as a dietary assistant, which seemed innocuous enough.

I was trained to assemble meal trays for the children based on their special needs. Most of the menus were easy enough: handi-wipes here, an extra rubber-tipped spoon there, but Nathaniel's was a pain. I dreaded his every time. Every one of his trays needed handi-wipes, a vanilla shake, a rubber-tipped spoon, honey-thickened liquids, and a special portion size – plus he had seven allergies!

One day, as I was preparing Nathaniel's menu, my eyes wandered to his stats. I was surprised to learn that he was my age. I had always assumed that all the patients were young children who were born into their struggles. I asked my supervisor, and she told me that Nathaniel was injured in a car accident at 12. He would probably have to say in the hospital until he was 18. I asked what would happen after that, and she shrugged before heading off to address more pressing issues.

I thought about what I had been doing when I was 12. I was praying for a cell phone, and proud of myself for being allowed to walk around downtown with my friends with no parents. When Nathaniel was 12, he was stuck in the hospital, having tasted the same life I had and knowing that he could never have it again. I wanted to meet him. I asked my supervisor, who told me she would take me to meet all of the kids I created menus for.

“Well, the ones who can talk back to you,” she added.

The following week, I came in ready to meet the kids. My supervisor was not in the office, so I started on a set of menus while I waited for her. Anticipating Nathaniel's complicated menu, I was no longer agitated at the thought of it. I felt a special connection to him now. I was immediately nervous when I couldn't find his sheet. There was no way he could have been released. I found my supervisor in the kitchen and when she saw me, her face fell.

“Where's Nathaniel's card?”

She hesitated. I didn't say anything. We stared at each other for a couple of long seconds.

“Nathaniel passed away yesterday.”


The author's comments:
This is just a first draft of my college esasy. I haven't sent it to my guidance counselor for edits or anything, it was just the first try. Let me know what you think :)

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on Dec. 27 2011 at 9:42 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

i hope that means you enjoyed it lol. i feel like you felt the same way i did when this happened to me. like you weren't personally close to the situation, so you shouldnt feel affected by it, but you still do and it's confusing. maybe lol.

on Dec. 27 2011 at 6:16 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

I just don't know how to process this. Reading this, I could feel my throat closing up. Your writing style is clear, well written and has a certain effect on the reader.

on Nov. 14 2011 at 9:44 am
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

Isn't that always the way? So sad :(  but thank you for reading it and im glad you enjoyed it :)

on Nov. 14 2011 at 9:43 am
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

thanks soo muchh! glad you enjoyed itt!

on Nov. 14 2011 at 9:43 am
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

I just got into my first onee! :D thanks for reading!

on Oct. 1 2011 at 2:28 pm
TheWordSmith SILVER, Placerville, California
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Excellent! This is very well-written... I really enjoyed reading it. Great message, and it could definitely could get you into a college. :)

julian GOLD said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 6:27 pm
julian GOLD, Eugene, Oregon
17 articles 17 photos 223 comments

Favorite Quote:
The goal is not about living forever, the goal is about creating something that can.

Editor's choice means that the editor(s) thought your piece was "above par" and exceptional. And this is their way of letting you know that. Sadly it doesn't mean you're going to get published, although the chances are probably higher than for someone without an editor's choice award.

julian GOLD said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 6:25 pm
julian GOLD, Eugene, Oregon
17 articles 17 photos 223 comments

Favorite Quote:
The goal is not about living forever, the goal is about creating something that can.

Wonderfully written! I love writing that is both beautiful, and contains a message underneath. And your writing definitely has a strong and powerful message about never judging a book by its cover, or rather never judging a hospitalized kid by his dietary needs! Beautiful flow and powerful. Keep up the great work when you're in college!

on Sep. 30 2011 at 6:14 pm
JoetheBlanc GOLD, Roswell, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"the shadow proves the sunshine!"

This is an amazing story. It always seems the last four sentences always happen, though.

on Sep. 1 2011 at 9:19 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

thanks so much! its 100% true by the way :) glad you enjoyed it!

on Sep. 1 2011 at 9:18 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

I thought the same thing, and in my final draft I added a short paragraph in the beginning about how he affected me. Thanks for reading and for your thoughtful criticism! I'll definitely take a look at your piece :)

on Sep. 1 2011 at 7:24 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Who's getting into college?

You!

This piece was amazing and well-written. Is this based on a true story or purely fictional? I loved the flow of it , and the ending made me emotional. This is great , even for a first draft. Keep it up!!!!


on Sep. 1 2011 at 7:10 pm
Readqueenz7 SILVER, Oak Park, Illinois
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I think this is really great. My only critique is that you might want to add more about how Nathaniel has affected you. Idk how you feel, but maybe Nathaniel's life has made you more greatful for the one you have, or you realized life is short. (Although try to stay away from clichés like that.) Otherwise, very beautifully written. If you could check mine out (it's called "Blondes Across Borders") too that would be great.

on Sep. 1 2011 at 2:38 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
40 articles 1 photo 773 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

yeah! no prob! you deserve it! :)(:

on Aug. 31 2011 at 5:40 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

thanks so muuchh!

on Aug. 31 2011 at 12:03 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
40 articles 1 photo 773 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

I loved it!! very nice job! beautiful!!! great work! :)(:

on Aug. 29 2011 at 8:12 am
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

yaay thank youu! so you think it could get me into college? :P

on Aug. 29 2011 at 2:26 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

That was such a wonderfully written piece. I'm amazed. The way you started and led into the story was very naturally done. Excellent job :)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 9:53 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 297 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

thank you so muchh! im so glad you liked itt :D now, do you know what it means if its an "editor's choice?"

totoro said...
on Aug. 23 2011 at 6:45 pm
You have a beautiful, clear writing style. I love what you've already written. Now, try to focus on you. Reveal something about yourself to readers who know nothing about you. Good luck! I have a feeling your final draft will be a good one.


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