Friend No More

February 4, 2013
By redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"


Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
There was a time that you were so sweet to me
But that changed after I started dating
You made him out to be your enemy

You told me that he was all wrong for me
And when I didn’t listen, you got mean
You tried to make fun and put him down
But we all could plainly see your jealousy

Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
I kept saying that the comments had to stop
But then you turned and slurred at me
And started to throw darts at my heart

One day the snide remarks went too far
My boyfriend and I finally got an apology
You had tried in vain to boost your ego
Instead it showed your immaturity and insecurity

Hey, I thought that you used to be my friend
But toxic friendships are meant to end
We both need time for our hearts to mend
So goodbye, my ex-best friend


The author's comments:
This is a poem about a real situation that a went through. One of my guy friends got really jealous when I started to date another guy. He tried to pick fights with him. My boyfriend and I tried to ignore his behavior because we thought it would subside, but it didn't. He even stopped being nice to me and called me really hurtful things. I told him off and have kept my distance from him ever since.

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on Feb. 19 2013 at 1:50 pm
GreekGoddess BRONZE, Andover, Connecticut
3 articles 0 photos 182 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm not superstitious, I believe in irony.
~Me

hmm, I like how you went through a time period in this. R eally good. Awsome work. 

on Feb. 17 2013 at 9:39 pm
Maggie99 SILVER, Versailles, Kentucky
6 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference. -Robert Frost

That was good. Keep it up!

on Feb. 15 2013 at 7:37 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

really good I liked it 

on Feb. 15 2013 at 7:08 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

I really like it!

on Feb. 15 2013 at 5:42 pm
bruisedmemories ELITE, Birdsboro, Pennsylvania
109 articles 10 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're young, you can fly, but we trip on clouds 'cause we get too high" -The Band Perry (Song: Don't Let Me Be Lonely)
"Cause no matter what, you'll never be alone" -Lady Antebellum (Song: Compass)

Very well written! Good job!

Kris_10 GOLD said...
on Feb. 14 2013 at 7:24 pm
Kris_10 GOLD, North Scituate, Rhode Island
10 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not the critic who counts; not the man who points out how the strong man stumbles... The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena, whose face is marred by dust and sweat and blood..." -Theodore Roosevelt

This same thing happned to me! so I can really relate to it. I really liked the structure for this poem but the rhythm was kind off hard to keep. 

on Feb. 12 2013 at 4:57 pm
SteelersJdog GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 29 comments
Wow, I'm glad that I'm not the only person to have this happen to. Fantastic job of writing a relatable topic in a poetic and artistic form.

OldYoungOne said...
on Feb. 12 2013 at 3:24 pm
It's missing something. I think you could had more of a flow to it or maybe add some.... I don't really know but there is something missing to where I can't connect with the poem or embrace it completely....

Soccer23 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2013 at 8:49 pm
Soccer23 GOLD, Rockton, Illinois
11 articles 11 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength, while loving someone deeply gives you courage.
Lao Tzu

I actually can relate to this quite a bit. I'm going through the same kind of stuff. But i love the last to stanzas. To improve this poem i believe that you can add some more imagery. But overall, I liked it. Especailly since it is very relateable

on Feb. 10 2013 at 1:14 pm
TheHerbArtist SILVER, Paradise, California
6 articles 0 photos 25 comments
This is good, it explains the story very clearly and I like it because I think a lot of people can relate to it. Maybe use a little more imagery to really show poetic launguage. But overall, it was really thoughtful, I enjoyed reading it (:

on Feb. 10 2013 at 12:07 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

This is another kind of bullying I guess, I like the way the poem goes .... but you sure could spice it up a bit. And the last line is epic yet heart-breaking..I wish I never have to say goodbye to my bestie....

on Feb. 7 2013 at 4:43 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

The rhyme is irregular, and I think you could have used more imagery, but I REALLY Liked the last two stanzas! I think by going back over it and refining it could leave you with a very good poem:)

on Feb. 7 2013 at 7:28 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 211 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

This piece is okay, as your theme is quite moderate in it's strength, and I feel you could have put it down in a better way. There is an irregular rhyme, and the words are too plain, nearly like a ficiton narration, there's no flow of 'poetry'. So the poem's not very engrossing, there's room for more improvement. Try getting a better flow by writing poems on mundane things, like a pen or a laptop, that may help. the first line of each para, "hey, i thought..." is really something that interested me. I'd appreciate if you'd comment on my pieces as well.  




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