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Death Has Its Heart in the Right Place

March 14, 2009
By Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Looking down the barrel of a gun is a strange feeling, but after staring into Death's dark face so many times, Jack had become accustomed to the tickles and prickles that run across your spine. It had become a familiar, a common, an ordinary feeling. He almost liked it, the sensation, of Death looming about, waiting for the perfect moment to strike. To him, it was intoxicating. It made his heart race, his blood pump and adrenaline run. It was like being in love for the first time, and the last. Yet every time that the Reaper swung his scythe on the mob boss, he always seemed to stop, never finishing the job. It was as though he, Death, took pleasure in seeing Jack sweat under his blade. They both enjoyed the mad thrill, but it seemed that this would be the last time they would saviour it.
Bang! The thunderous roar of the gun shattered the calm night. It was over.
'Here. You can keep it,' the assassin tossed the smoking gun onto Jack's cold lap.
A sinister smile cut the killer's face. Raising his chin proudly, as a young boy does after winning a prize, the mercenary turned around slowly, savouring his victory. Now all he had to do was collect his pay and live comfortably on some exotic island for the rest of his life, without worries, without problems, without necessities, without ' Bang! A second shot.
The assassin's knees broke under the pain. One moment he was savouring glory and the next he was savouring the bitter sweet taste of warm steel, the killer kiss of a bullet. On all fours, he lifted his trembling hand up to his chest: his shirt was soaked in blood that was spewing out on both sides of his trunk. He was cold, weak, in pain. Frozen sweat poured down his face as his insides burnt in anguish.
Writhing on the floor with no strength at all, he turned around to see who the shooter was. Behind him, sitting in the same leather-cushion seat he had been sitting when the assassin came in, Jack sat. The only difference was that now his right arm was outstretched with his fingers curled around the gun. His eyelids were heavy upon his red eyes, but he still maintained them wide open.
'No ' Impossible ' I shot you ' I shot you in the heart.'
Jack licked his lips and explained slowly, enjoying every word, 'I am dextrocardi-ac.'


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on May. 21 2011 at 9:03 am
missscribbles SILVER, Paris, Other
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WOW. "tickles and prickles". Love it.

on May. 14 2011 at 2:26 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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My pleasure! Thanks for commenting!

on May. 14 2011 at 2:11 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks for the comment! I'll read your story right away: sounds interesting! Glad you enjoyed!

on May. 14 2011 at 10:23 am
augustsun02 SILVER, Hamburg, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Write. It doesn't matter if you're overjoyed, furious, miserable, or what. Write to keep those emotions in check while managing to grow stronger.

Andy B.: Hey, do you think you could check out my story Only Almost? It's located in the other novels section under fiction. It should be in the category of most recent. I'd really apreciate it if you could read it and give your honest feedback. Thanx :)

on May. 13 2011 at 5:44 pm
tikapeek97 BRONZE, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"good things come in small packages" =)

I cant get over what a great strory it is I loved it each time I read it. Keep up the awesome work. If you could check out my newest story Guilty at Heart I would really like it. Good job again. =)

on May. 13 2011 at 11:48 am
augustsun02 SILVER, Hamburg, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Write. It doesn't matter if you're overjoyed, furious, miserable, or what. Write to keep those emotions in check while managing to grow stronger.

Still not over what a cool story this is!!!!!! Ughs, srry if i spelll stuff wrong in my comment. I just got out of school & am totally beat seein as i got only like 3hrs of sleep.

 

Thanx 4 the really nice comment on my poem!!! Really appreciate it :)


on May. 13 2011 at 3:19 am
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks! It would be a pleasure to read your works! Glad you enjoyed!

on May. 12 2011 at 9:27 pm
augustsun02 SILVER, Hamburg, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Write. It doesn't matter if you're overjoyed, furious, miserable, or what. Write to keep those emotions in check while managing to grow stronger.

I don't care what AdultSwim has to say, your story was AMAZING!!!! I absolutely loved it!!!! I would be totally, like, honored if you read my poem Bcuz Of U. Please read it and please give your honest opinion. I also have the beginning of a story posted on one of the forums. If you'd like, I'd really appreciate it if you read what little bit of the story written and give me some constructive criticism. Thanks, and again, LOVED the story!!!! :)

on May. 7 2011 at 11:59 am
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

on May. 6 2011 at 9:22 pm
Shawntae90 GOLD, Sunnyvale, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Every saint has a past, every sinner has a future" Oscar Wilde

AMAZING!!! It made me want to look up what the ending means. It was really good! Really nicely written, and the ending was perfect, truly!! :)

on Apr. 26 2011 at 4:57 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks! A lot of people don't know the condition, that's one of the things I found interesting about it! Glad you enjoyed!

on Apr. 26 2011 at 10:45 am
IncorrectlyWired GOLD, Milford, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"No great genius has ever existed without some touch of madness." - Aristotle

Man, perfect opening hook... perfect ending. I didn't know what that condition was at first. That might be my only "complaint." But I still really liked it.

on Apr. 23 2011 at 12:18 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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I cannot seem to find your article. Could you please pass me the link?

on Apr. 23 2011 at 12:09 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks! I'll check out your story right now! Glad you enjoyed!

on Apr. 23 2011 at 10:53 am
tikapeek97 BRONZE, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"good things come in small packages" =)

wow that is really good. It was cool how he was saved by a medical condition. You should check out and comment on my story Running.

on Apr. 20 2011 at 2:47 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

on Apr. 19 2011 at 6:22 pm
SarahUncharted BRONZE, Skittles, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
this too, shall pass

i loved this. i had to look up dextrocardiac, but seriously, this was great

on Apr. 15 2011 at 4:24 am
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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It makes me happy that you enjoyed the story that much! Thanks for the comment!

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on Apr. 13 2011 at 9:03 am
itsmejustme, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
''Make an effort to change the views, if you shut up, it'll continue forever!"

VERY VERY GOOD! I am very MUCH IMPRESSED. I MEAN LIKE, WOW!

on Apr. 10 2011 at 4:11 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks for your comment! I know the page says "dextrocardi-ac", but that's a typo. I'm not really sure where the hyphen came from. Happy you enjoyed it!