I awake in a cell chained up with cuffs i dont feel or see anything but darkness and dust. I try to get up but i start to feel numb,then i fall back on my bum. I start thing do i realy deserve this WHAT HAVE I DONE? I hear voices in the dark i think im going CRAZY! I get up again with better luck. my stoumich and me start feelen like sick disgusting muck. i keep movin looking for a wall until i suddenly trip OH NO NO AHHH I FALL! i get up looking around with my ajusted eyes i start seeing a trip wire reaching across left to right! so i follewed the wire it led to a gun of some sort but in the dark couldet tell but all i know i was supposed to DIE! i kept walking until i almost trip on a crate. i look inside and find a loaf of bread and a pitcher of water this leaves me in terrible dismay. thoughts come to me horrible thoughts i start to think is THIS MY LAST SUPPER ALIVE! IS THIS WHERE I AM TO MEET THE USHER OF MY DEMISE! NO THIS IS TRECECHERY THIS IS A LIE! THIS I WILL NOT BE COMPRIMISED! i hear the voices again. they tell me what i dont want said they tell me MY FATE IS SET!!! i finnish eating i feel sick. my sight becomes blury it becomes a dark mist. i fall and just lye there thinking the goal of survival is just to far. just to hard. im going to DIE IN THIS UNRELENTING WRETCHED DARK!!!
Fear Chapter 1 The Darkness vs The Mind
I really like it. Its a fun read and definitely gets your audience thinking. However, I feel like the spelling mistakes (if intentional) don't add to the content of your work. If unintentional, then just give your work a bit more revision. Other than that its awesome. Keep writing.
I few spelling mistakes, but overall magnificent :)



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