Bad Day at School

December 30, 2011
By Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein


The sirens are blaring in my fragile ears while terrified students are screaming and racing aimlessly down the packed hallways. I can hear people's footsteps smashing onto the cold, dark concrete floor like the ferocious drum beats at a giant rock and roll concert. I can hear the wind violently whip by as it tosses my brown hair back and forth. I peer out a nearby window and see a menacing dark twister bearing down on our tiny defenseless school. A terrifying thought, which has been slowly forming, finally hits me: I am going to die today!

I just stand there frozen in place, gazing at the last things I'll see before I die: Overturned desks, books soaring through the air, and people with horror-struck expressions glued to their faces. Suddenly the window shatters behind me, sending deadly shards of gleaming glass across the room. I look down at the backs of my arms and see violet red blood streaming down to the floor. I panic and join the mad herd of students tearing through the hallway. The lights overhead are flashing on and off like giant eruptions of lightning in a thunderstorm. As I run toward the stairs, I hear the deafening crash of the walls behind me, toppling over like dominoes and silencing my classmates screams.


The author's comments:
This is a story based on a true event that happened to me in elementary school. Basically a tornado had touched down and was heading toward our school. So as a 1st grader I was freaked out. Thankfully the tornado lifted back up about 1/2 mile from our school.

So, looking back on this as a teenager, I decided to write it in the perspective of a teenager and spice it up a bit.

I actually wrote this last year in my creative writing class as a "Show vs Tell" piece.

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on Apr. 26 2014 at 11:52 pm
_Tennessee_Love_ BRONZE, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
¨the difference between promises and memories, is that we break promise and memories break us.¨

Very deep and vivid, I went to where you were nice job! :)

on May. 5 2012 at 10:29 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Great job with the imagery, to me felt more like a poem than a story. But great job!!!

on Apr. 20 2012 at 9:37 pm
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.

Wow, this was so vivid. It really put me into the scene! The imagery was amazing, and the last line was so strong. It really left a haunting impact. Beautiful job on such a dark subject.

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Mar. 7 2012 at 5:03 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

Thanks! That was what I was trying to do

MrLee66 said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 12:47 pm
Your use of language was very vivid and I could feel your emotions.




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