The Good Doctor

July 28, 2011
By Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.


The police sirens wailed behind us, but my captor was not about to slow down. My abhorrent abductor, Dr. Joseph Blaine; was our family’s doctor for the past 20 years. It was close to midnight and pitch black outside. It seemed even the moon was too terrified to be out. I was sitting with my hands bound by ropes and my mouth gagged with one of his Hermes, monogrammed scarves.

It was raining, which made the already precipitous roads even more dangerous. As we drove farther into the chilling forest the police sirens become quieter. He drove us far into the woods. I walked these woods many times as a child. I knew every turn and could name every sound. This time was different. The moon was hidden behind dark clouds, the forest was silent, even the wind still.

The car started to slow down, he stopped in front of a cabin hidden on the south side of the woods. Dr. Blaine pulled me out of the back seat and dragged me by my hair into the cabin. He threw me down onto the cold wood floor, and then went into one of the bedrooms. I was shaking with fear, my stomach churned, I was never one for prayer, but even I found myself pleading with god.

He stayed inside the room for what seemed like hours. When the good doctor remerged he was drunk and reeked of whisky. He ran up to me and hit me! He beat me till I was more debilitated than a starving child. Once he had his fill the doctor went to bed. I just laid there on the floor. Too tired and scared to move.

The cabin seemed to get darker with each passing moment. Four hours later Dr. Blaine reemerged; he looked at me with those soulless black eyes of his. He looked hungry for flesh at that moment my heart stopped; the kind man I knew 20 years ago was no longer there…


The author's comments:
I wrote this last year for my Honors World Lit. class. The assignment was to finish the sentence with a story.

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on Aug. 22 2011 at 7:41 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

good point! Thanks!

on Aug. 22 2011 at 7:27 pm
rage_against_the_machine BRONZE, St. Augustine, Florida
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Difficult takes a day. Impossible takes.. oh, about a week?

That's why I try not to think about response- just write with your instincts and what you are happy with. It will probably be better for it.

on Aug. 22 2011 at 6:57 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

I wanted to get graphic, but was a little afraid of the response I might get! :)

on Aug. 22 2011 at 6:56 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

Thanks! And yeah I Will

on Aug. 21 2011 at 6:24 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Very interesting and fast paced-piece. I wish that you had included some dialouge, expanded, let the reader know the reason behind this. Otherwise, great job!

Could you please read some of my work, rate, and tell me what you think?


on Aug. 20 2011 at 9:15 pm
rage_against_the_machine BRONZE, St. Augustine, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Difficult takes a day. Impossible takes.. oh, about a week?

Interesting concept.. I feel like some of the words and similes you used felt not quite right in the text. I wish you had been more descriptive, though! I was only on the precipice of fear in this, I should have been falling into the chasm. Just some thoughts :)

Megan.J.B said...
on Aug. 20 2011 at 8:43 pm
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
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"Here's the real truth. There are eight million people in this city. And those teeming masses exist for the sole purpose of lifting the few exceptional people onto their shoulders. You, me? We're exceptional."
- Green Goblin. :)

Ah, I see. I mean good for you for being able to appropraitely use an extensive vocabulary though.

on Aug. 20 2011 at 7:14 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

This was originally a class assignment and I had to use those words

on Aug. 20 2011 at 7:12 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!

Megan.J.B said...
on Aug. 20 2011 at 1:33 pm
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Here's the real truth. There are eight million people in this city. And those teeming masses exist for the sole purpose of lifting the few exceptional people onto their shoulders. You, me? We're exceptional."
- Green Goblin. :)

This was rather good :) The only thing I was too fond of was some forced vocabulary, where you put more advanced words into a sentence where a more common and therefore smoother word would have been appropriate. That being said, I did enjoy your descriptions and plot.

Harebelle GOLD said...
on Aug. 19 2011 at 7:11 pm
Harebelle GOLD, Vancouver, Other
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Oh, I want to know more! I love the details you included, like the Hermes scarves. This was so intense to read!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 4:28 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

Aww thank you!!! 

on Aug. 19 2011 at 4:27 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

I promise I will continue this!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 1:17 pm
Thief_of_your_heart SILVER, Knox, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
live long and rock on!

Achievement you made:

You made my heart double its beat.

I now have goose bumps.

And lastly…I’m terrified of my Doc. now.

In all seriousness though this was well written and I had to read it to the end.

Good job! :D


on Aug. 18 2011 at 11:32 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

serkgthselkrtjgdf i want to hear more of thiiss! you should definitely continue it. there was a spot where you changed tenses- you wrote become instead of became- but i think it was probably just a typo. and i think its proper to capitalize God but im not sure if thats like just a bible thing or an always thing lol. overall, a really good job. i hope this isnt the end of this storyy! :)

on Aug. 4 2011 at 8:34 am
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

Haha that was my goal! Thanks and tell your friends to read this! :)

eMiLyP GOLD said...
on Aug. 4 2011 at 8:31 am
eMiLyP GOLD, Jeannette, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Life is short; speak your mind, say what ya wanna say, and do what ya wanna do (as long as you don't get caught!).

This is really good! And scary, too. : ) It was really interesting and I found myself leaning towards my computer screen, anticipating what happens next.


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