Janie's House

November 4, 2010
By BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.


My life.
My life was pretty good until Janie stepped in.
Oh, Janie. She thought she was the ONLY girl who had a life, a family, friends or happiness.
And let me tell you this, she had NONE of those.
Oh, yes, we were best friends in 1st grade. We went to each other’s houses, rode the bus together, even met up after school outside the shed.
Whenever I went to her house, the options of where to hang out were outside or in the car. That’s it.
She didn’t want me to see what went on inside…
Mom walked out right after she got out of the hospital. Dad’s an alcoholic. Brother’s in a gang. Sister got shot by a member of her own brother’s gang.
I found it out two years ago…in sixth grade.
I was walking home, and I heard a crash.
It came from Janie’s house.
I looked across the street and saw what had happened through the door, which had been propped open.
I saw a bottle being flung across the room.
At Janie.
I was shocked. I froze where I was and was trying to think of what to do.
Do I call the police?
Go over there and stop it?
Go home…and say nothing?
Yes. That’s just what I did. And when Janie didn’t come to school the next day, or the day after that, or the day after that… I started getting a little worried.
We hadn’t been REAL friends for about 5 years already, but we just lived close to each other.
One week after that incident, I was walking home and I saw her house.
Unpainted. Empty. Dark. Broken. Abandoned.
I had her cell phone number and called it…
Ring ring. Ring ring.
I heard a phone start ringing, and it was coming from her house.
I walked up to her old home, tears filling my eyes, and stepped inside.
In the middle of the floor was Janie’s phone…and a note attached to it.
I bent down, sobbing, and picked up the note. It read:

Della,
I’m not sure if you’ll ever read this…but I feel good writing it, so I’ll keep going. Remember in first grade? We would walk home together? That was really fun…I wish I could have hugged you one last time before we drifted apart. But I couldn’t. You see, the reason that I only let us hang out in the yard or in the car was because…well… I had a pretty messed up life. My dad was an alcoholic…mom left us. My brother’s in a gang… and my sister…well, she died. She was shot by a gang member. I never wanted you to think little of me, and that’s why I never wanted you to know…but then you found out when my dad threw the bottle at me. I saw you, Della. It’s okay, though. You have my phone, my diary, and this letter. My diary is in my room…up the stairs to the right. On my bedside table in the corner. Look, I wish I could stay with you, but the only thing I can say to you now is good-bye. Della, I had a nice run. I had 14 years! 14 years with you. My best friend. I never wanted anything more than that. But I’m gone now. I will never see you again. You told me all your secrets and now you need to know all of mine. In my phone there are all my texts. Also, you have my diary. So, now, Della, I have to say…bye. I love you.
Your best friend,
Janie

I almost cried…no wait, I did.
I ran up the stairs, tears streaming down my face, into her room. As the letter said, her diary was awaiting me on the nightstand.
Another note lay atop it:

Della, I am gone. Not dead but also not alive. I will be with you your whole life. We will meet again, though. I promise it will be soon, too. Love, Janie.

Ever since then I haven’t told anyone about that…until today. Ever since I started seeing her ghost I had to be locked up in this mad-house. Geez, when can I stop writing in this journal?!


The author's comments:
This is my first piece, so I hope you like it...this is not related to me at all; I just get random ideas that pop up into my head. HOPE YOU LIKE IT! :) Also, I love to hear people's ideas about what to write and if you liked what I wrote, so tell me your opinion! <3 THANKS!

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on Nov. 22 2010 at 11:56 am
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

lol thanks brie!!!!!!!!

brie<3 said...
on Nov. 21 2010 at 6:25 pm
omigoshh Jo that was sooooo good!!!!!!! U should make like a whole book on that! :)

on Nov. 14 2010 at 6:03 pm
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

oh wow thank you so much! i didnt ever think anyone would read it, and now my teacher did and everyone so thank you! and thanks for showing it to people too. I really love to write, incase you couldnt tell XD

on Nov. 14 2010 at 2:26 pm
omg this was ah-mazzingg!!! like all my friends r reading it and they think its really good! ur such an awesome writer

on Nov. 14 2010 at 11:28 am
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

thanks bacon!!!! youre the best <333

on Nov. 14 2010 at 10:53 am
it was soo sad but i love it

on Nov. 11 2010 at 1:18 pm
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

thank you!!!!  i really appreciate it :-)

giiglez SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 10:13 am
giiglez SILVER, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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love always comes with a sacrafice

i love it its great

on Nov. 9 2010 at 6:24 am
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

hehe thank yaaaa!

on Nov. 9 2010 at 6:23 am
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

THANKS!!! i really love hearing what ppl think so i can improve...got any story ideas? lol

on Nov. 9 2010 at 6:23 am
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

oh okay...it was just explaining how her life was messed up....but how its under the category of thiller/suspense/mystery  its kind of a "fill in what you think" kinda thing XD THANKS!!!!

KellyR GOLD said...
on Nov. 8 2010 at 12:43 pm
KellyR GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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We don't read and write poetry because it's cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for.

I thought this was good! It was pretty solid until all of a sudden your like I'm locked up in a madhouse and I see Janies Ghost in one sentence which is defiently not enough for that kind of statement. Also, I had a little trouble understand the fourth sentence it doesn't really seem to fit the rest of your story?

on Nov. 7 2010 at 7:38 pm
RBrown201 BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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This was amazing! 

on Nov. 7 2010 at 4:06 pm
livingmylife4512 SILVER, Pleasant Plains, Illinois
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Any lyric by The Maine or Never Shout Never
"I am I, you are you, we are we, we could live in such harmony"

Haha you're welcome!! I'll be looking for your new work. Keep itup!

Charlotte<3 said...
on Nov. 7 2010 at 3:13 pm
Awhh, this was great Jo! I know I'm not really a writer, but I thought it was pretty good! :D

on Nov. 7 2010 at 12:49 pm
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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I dunno.

Oh my goodness thank you so much! I wasn't expecting anyone to comment on this or even read it...but that you so much! This is my first published piece, so please tell me (when they come out, or even if...) if yuo like my others!! <3 THANKS!!!!!!

on Nov. 6 2010 at 7:31 pm
livingmylife4512 SILVER, Pleasant Plains, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Any lyric by The Maine or Never Shout Never
"I am I, you are you, we are we, we could live in such harmony"

The beginning was probably the best of this! I think it was all really good and had a nice story line. The ending was a little...out there from the rest of the story though. You may want to work on the last paragraph. other than that, this is really good! (:


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