And Then There Was Nothing

September 1, 2010
By polarizedsirens BRONZE, Enola, Pennsylvania
polarizedsirens BRONZE, Enola, Pennsylvania
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"If you're not willing to risk it all, then you don't want it bad enough."


Preface
The world flashed before my eyes. At that moment, I knew everything would be over. I would never see the light of day again. I would disintegrate into nothingness. I reach out to my friend, Paeton, but he shoots me a look of pity and heads into the smoke. I attempt to sigh, but I just end up coughing up blood.

I can blame this all on one person: Eric Etonmy. His ideas to create anarchy started when we were 16. From there, he started to fulfill his plans, and look where we are today, utter chaos.

But of course, I can’t start my story from this moment can I? When I’m about to suffocate on my own blood? No, that would call for much of a story if you ask me.


The author's comments:
Hi everyone! Well this is the first story I'm submitting on TeenInk, and keep in mind this is only the preface, hence why it's so short. Please critically review the story as it goes on, because your comments will be appreciated :D

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Ash:D said...
on Sep. 7 2010 at 11:16 am

hey i really like this :) 

i've written a piece similar to this one mind checking it out? 

Its called ALONE (part 1) its actually just a short intro. 

Thankss x 


on Sep. 6 2010 at 8:44 am
booknerd BRONZE, Robinson, Texas
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"Reality is merely an illusion. Albeit a very persistant one."















-Einstein

I really really liked it!!!!!! It really catches the reader: good hook. Submit more work! Could you check out mine? I only submitted one story and I'm new to teen ink too so I need some comments! It's called Sunshine! =)


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