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The Reflecting Pool

August 18, 2010
By TaliaWolf SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
TaliaWolf SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I mean this girl was beautiful, and I'm from Miami where beautiful people go to spawn"
Alex Flinn


My place of peace was an old house. Creaking, moaning, unconcerned with the sins of the humans who lived there. It collected their stories without bias without care keeping them in walls no one could kill. Now it will hold my story in its many halls full of twists and turns, ups and downs, and forgotten stairways. The reflecting pool is smooth as glass, perfect and still. The predawn air is chilled promising an early snow. The roads to this living house will soon be blocked, and it will be many months before more visitors come. I turn my back on the skeletal trees reaching bony hands towards the sky, seeming to beg for mercy. It will be many months before I return to this house that holds my memories and my crimes.


The author's comments:
We were working on this for tone and personally it's always given me chills to write as the villian so this was an extremly fun piece

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-Missy- BRONZE said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 3:20 pm
-Missy- BRONZE, Ahhh, South Dakota
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This was a very good and descriptive piece. Good job!

on Aug. 29 2010 at 2:39 pm
TaliaWolf SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I mean this girl was beautiful, and I'm from Miami where beautiful people go to spawn"
Alex Flinn

I'm really glad you liked it :) usually I have a hard time describing something without rambling so I'm really glad this came out so well. I'll definatly read your piece.

on Aug. 29 2010 at 10:58 am
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

This was beautiful.  The imagery was just stunning, anf somehow you crammed all of that detail into that little paragraph, and it didn't seem like too much at all.

Can you comment and rate my story, "Encounter"?