I'm Sorry

August 9, 2010
By SydneyEllen96 SILVER, Martinsville, Indiana
SydneyEllen96 SILVER, Martinsville, Indiana
5 articles 18 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Allons-y!" - Tenth Doctor (Doctor Who)
"Hello, Sweetie." - River Song (Doctor Who)
"Do not enter the city. It belongs to the dead now." - Rick Grimes (The Walking Dead)


Tap. Tap. Tap.

The sound of the knife hitting the wall scared me even more. This isn't good. This wasn't going to be good. How I ended up under my bed hiding from my boyfriend, I don't know. Well, yes, I do know. I told him that I didn't like the shirt he was wearing and asked him if he could change before we left for the movies.

He turned angry, yelling at me and saying that I was the one who picked out the shirt. I did not. That then lead to both of us yelling at each other and then fighting. That' when the knife came out. He had already cut my cheek when I started running.

My house was huge, so I could easily hide in places he didn't know where to look. But, of course, under my bed wasn't a good spot at all.

And then it stopped. The tapping stopped, but the footsteps didn't. I heard his boots hit the hardwood floor in my room. My breath quickened and I placed a hand over my mouth. I'm sure he could hear my heartbeat under the bed. His feet stopped at the edge of my bed and he sat down, the bed squeaking and falling where he sat. He took a breath and I closed my eyes, knowing this was going to be the last thing I heard.

“I'm sorry,” he said quietly before I felt all his weight on my bed. Silence, nothing. I was scared to come out from under my bed, but I quietly slid out and stayed to where I knew he couldn't see me. I saw the glitter of the metal knife on the floor in the moonlight, but something else shined next to it. I slowly stood up, feeling like an idiot, but I knew I could run if I had to.
On my bed lay him, my boyfriend, covered in a red liquid. I now knew what it was; blood. He killed himself. He committed suicide right on my bed, right over where I was hiding. What a tragic ending to my love life.


The author's comments:
I thought this would be an interesting short story. It's actully part of a story I'm writing right now ^_^ Enjoy.

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Stolla BRONZE said...
on Sep. 22 2010 at 9:29 am
Stolla BRONZE, Sunman, Indiana
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Outside a dog, a book is Man's best friend. And inside a dog, it's too dark to read. -Groucho Marx-

I really enjoyed reading this... its very suspensful and it makes you want to keep reading! :)

But it is kinda depressing...


VizioDarkly said...
on Aug. 17 2010 at 12:48 am
VizioDarkly, Fresno, California
0 articles 6 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Following our will and wind,
We may just go where no one's been.
We'll ride the spiral to the end,
And may just go where no one's been.
Spiral out. Keep going.
Spiral out. Keep going.
Spiral out. Keep going."
-Tool, "Lateralus"

great intro, btw.

VizioDarkly said...
on Aug. 17 2010 at 12:47 am
VizioDarkly, Fresno, California
0 articles 6 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Following our will and wind,
We may just go where no one's been.
We'll ride the spiral to the end,
And may just go where no one's been.
Spiral out. Keep going.
Spiral out. Keep going.
Spiral out. Keep going."
-Tool, "Lateralus"

This is good, descriptive. I have to say, though, the ending (last paragraph) was more, like... telling what happened, rather than showing. i thought the article was great, but the way the last part was written was kinda, like stating more of an obvious and-then and-then format. other than that, though, the piece was excellent. i would appreciate it if you read my story the sickroom. it's long, though, so if you dont like reading long stories (it's divided into four parts) i have a piece called "untitled mind" that you might like. good article :)


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