Who is that...

April 3, 2010
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I shook my head and cocked it to the side. I groaned and pulled the covers over my head, only to make me feel trapped and sweaty. It was too quiet...

I lifted up my head from over the covers, and I sighed when I stared across my empty bedroom. The walls seemed to be an eerie blue, and my gasps came out in a hushed echo. It was only 9:00 pm. My parents were usually awake watching T.V or just listening to the radio, but this night was different. I could not hear ANYTHING.

Suddenly, I heard a voice that I did not recognize. The door was an inch open, but it was suddenly pushed full open, revealing a long silhouette that creeped on the bedroom door. I gasped and slowly slipped under the covers, trying to be unnoticable. Then, the blurry image seemed to crawl toward me, and I could finally see who this person was.

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Soccerball123 said...
Mar. 15, 2011 at 9:29 am

This story is amazing ccan wait to read more.


_Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:13 pm
Thank you!  =)
PJD17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 5:54 pm
The story was interesting.  i would like to read the rest of it when it is done.  Id appreciate it if you could read my artical  its called Claire Waits
Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:31 pm
Thanks PJD, and sure, I'll check it out. Thnx for the heads up.  =)
amzazinLily said...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 4:20 pm
wow! Really good, keep writing!!!
Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:30 pm
Thank u!   X)
HollerGirl26 said...
Jan. 26, 2011 at 5:56 pm
GRR!! Write some more, honey!? I will be waiting..<3 way to goooooo! Check out my stories maybe?? GRACIAS! :)
Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:26 pm

Thanks girl!   ;)   I'll be posting more on this profile.

I'll see your stuff, thanks!

HollerGirl26 replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 8:51 pm
You are SO welcome!!
luckyducky4 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 7:41 pm
very nice, u kept me hanging, ill definetly follow your story!
_Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:01 pm
Thanks for commenting! By the way, this is just my new account, and in a few months, I will be posting a novella. If you want you can check it out.   =)
Jakethesnake said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 7:58 pm
You still stuck?
Zavery_ replied...
Dec. 14, 2010 at 6:31 pm
Well, I'm not stuck. I have just been busy lately. I guess I should leave it a cliffhanger. I just don't have time to push beside with all my homework.   =(   Ah well, I'm glad eveyone wants to read the whole story. =)
vampiresrock said...
Oct. 26, 2010 at 10:33 am
WRITE MORE NOW!!!!!!!!!! i can't wait for more!
Zavery_ replied...
Oct. 30, 2010 at 10:27 pm
I'm not sure. I'm stuck. Thanks for the comment!   X)
AlyceR said...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 5:55 pm
I really want to read this whole thing now!!! I absoultly have to!
Zavery_ replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 3:19 pm
I'm glad you're enthusiastic. Thanks for the comment.   =)
B.R.Nack said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 9:10 pm

Awesome!! Tell me when the rest of the story is done!!! :)

You should read my story, it's called Tonight He Must Die :)

Zavery_ replied...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 12:26 pm
Thanks! I'm not sure if I really have a whole idea, or if I'll even continue it. I'll read your article. Thanks for commenting on mine!   ;)
Diana101 said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 12:49 pm

Amazing intro! Can't wait for the story! :)

Check out my story, it's called Murder of Guilt. :)

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