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Laughter. When was the last time I heard that? Laughs and giggles and the sounds of happiness.
Happy. The word seems foreign to me. They used to say it all the time. I used to say it.
Solitude is a comforting world. A world of no hate or confusion. It's simple. But, in solitude, you forget how to be happy.
I wish I remembered how to smile. How to laugh, how to just blow things off like I used to.
Luckily, I forgot how to cry. If I had remembered, I would probably never would have been able to live as long as I have. I would have spent all of my few last days crying.
But I have to stop myself. I have to stop myself from thinking about tears. Maybe if I stoppped thinking all together I could be happy again.
They could keep their imperfect society. This room was all I needed.
I knew I was dying. I wasn't sure if it was the thirst or the hunger or the disease.
They had locked me up.
Was I crazy? I have never spoken like a madman.
The whole room dripped with silence. It oozed that strange ringing that you get when you know you are about to die.
I limped over to the dusty cracked mirror. My eyes were calm....almost dead.
Almost dead. I could feel my breath getting shallow, my heart slowing. Slowing.
It was creeping along. My own death couldn't even spare me the torture of fear. I couldn't die quickly because nothing painful in my life had ever gone quickly.
Why would my death be an exception?
"Crazy!" They had all called me. "Crazy!"
Even as they locked the door I could hear their chants.
Solitude could keep me away from people who could be contaminated by my insane ways.
I liked this solitude, I thought.
Then I sighed. Even in my dying hours I lied to myself.
My skin began to feel prickly. And just as I laid down to die in this dark black room i heard the creaking of a door opening and a light met my closing eyes.
Now they choose to save me....Just as I lay with death strangling me.
Even as I die my pain is slow....
Then I realized that now someone could hear my last words.
"I...." I whispered, "I am not crazy...."
And then I prayed that someone heard me, and I closed my eyes, and I stopped breathing.




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Silverae said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 4:25 pm:
Hey Dallys! You can check out the second part of my story now! I hope you like it =)
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 11:06 am :
Thanks so much!! Glad u liked It!!
 
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TwinkletheVampire said...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 5:45 pm:
Amazing job, Sa-- I mean... DallysGrrl... lol don't want any creepers to learn your name and stalk you. You know I HATE stalkers. Well I just wanna let you know that you've got a shootload of talent (let's keep the language G-rated)... so KEEP ON WRITING, GIRL!!!
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 4:54 pm :
Haha thnx...i think. haha jk. thnx 4 the comment.
 
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roxawesomeness said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 11:26 am:
this story kept me reading 'til the end! very descriptive. all I would say is just add on a touch more
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 1:26 pm :
Thank u so much!!
 
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dominicana said...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 5:01 pm:
I really liked your story you are an amazing writer keep it up
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 6:09 pm :
Thank u so much!! Thnx. Wow. Thank u.
 
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MarinaOreo said...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 8:18 pm:
Wow. Ah-mazing. Very passionate, i can tell. I love the way you write.
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 8:26 pm :
Thank u so much!!!! I <3 how u write 2!!!! Thnx!!!!
 
MarinaOreo replied...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 8:32 pm :
You're welcome! and thank you !! :)
 
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Mercedes B. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 4:39 pm:
You clearly have a lot of passion and drive, and that's a good thing. However, you need to proof-read a little more. Your grammar is good but there are errors that will trip up and greatly annoy your readers. Also, I would stay away from dangerously overused cliches (the whole part about tears and then death strangling you may seem and in fact be deep and raw but you have to understand that your audience has heard and read it all a million times). Keep writing!
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 5:52 pm :
Thnx 4 the comment its always good 2 hear some constructive critisism....Thnx!! :-D
 
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WriteForLove said...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 5:00 pm:
Hey thanks so much for the coment!
And wow wow wow!!! This is absolutely amazing!!!!!! I had tears in my eyes! The emotion is so raw... It's just great! Definetly keep writing!
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 7:16 pm :
Thank u soooooooo much!!!! That makes me feel sooooooooo great!!
 
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CamilleMarie said...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 2:23 pm:
This is really great.
Creepy, yes, but good none-the-less.
 
DallysGrrl replied...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 4:25 pm :
Thnx so much i was really going 4 the creepy factor in this 1!!!! Thank u!!!!
 
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