The Ring

September 23, 2009
By Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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“I’ll never let you go, I just love you so!” I smiled, singing as I cooked dinner. Everything couldn’t be better. I’ve got a delicious turkey, mashed potatoes drowned in gravy, and bright purple cranberry sauce. Opening the refrigerator I peered inside.
“I’ll love you to the very end. You’ll be there, my forever friend!” I sang, loud and cheerfully. I twirled around and began to dance. Until I saw that James was there.
“Oh!” I cried out in surprise. James didn’t smile. Blushing, I closed the refrigerator door.
“What’s the matter, James?” I said as I kissed him on the cheek. James motioned for me to sit down. I could tell that this was serious and took a seat. Leaning forward I asked him,
“Come on, tell me the secret. We’ve known each other long enough, have we not?” James shook his head and looked down. Quizzically I looked into his eyes. His deep blue, luxurious eyes; eyes that I’ve wanted for so long. For too long.
“It’s Eliza. She…she was found. In the forest.” James said, his voice shaking uncontrollably. It was the day after the proposal when Eliza had disappeared. She had gone on her usual night walk. Everything had gone so well. James and Eliza had gotten engaged! James had gotten her the most beautiful ring. A marvelous blue diamond, clear as the blue sky, had been placed on her finger. This was the happiest day of their lives! Then Eliza and the ring never came back. Ever since then, I’ve been spending more time with James, hoping…
We looked for her, for a week straight. We never found her. With James crying on my shoulder, he accepted that she was gone. Now, Thanksgiving, this had to happen. I was furious! Why did they have to find her? For god’s sake, it’s Thanksgiving! Quickly putting the anger away, I let the long awaited sadness wave through me. Taking James’s hand into mine, I whispered,
“I’m so sorry, James. I really, truly am.” I started to rub his hand, trying to be a good person. But really, what was I supposed to do in this kind of situation? I looked deep into his eyes and watched them widen.
“James, what’s wrong?” I asked. James just stared at my hand in horror. Quickly letting go of my hand, he stood up.
“You…you have the ring!” James cried in terror. I smiled.



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on Jan. 18 2010 at 11:36 pm
ElizabethBlack PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
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ooooo very creepy. good job :)

zobean GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2010 at 3:55 pm
zobean GOLD, Northfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"A Good player inspires themselves. A GREAT player inspires others."

I LOVED IT! It would be so awesome if you could stretch this out and make it a book. I would read it LOL.

JeffN GOLD said...
on Nov. 28 2009 at 1:33 pm
JeffN GOLD, Moore, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"God Put Us Here On This Carnival Ride, We Close Our Eyes, Never Knowing Where It Will Take Us Next..." Carrie Underwood--Carnival Ride

Haha very clever, I liked it! It was short and sweet and it was very good.

Awesome job.

on Nov. 24 2009 at 12:42 pm
maguirre BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Id like to make myself believe that planet earth turn SSSLLOOOWWWLLYYY... !!

sweet this is great.

on Nov. 20 2009 at 10:40 am
pandaLICIOUS SILVER, Portland, Oregon
8 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
“For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone.” -Audrey Hepburn

Hey! Lia, I'm so sorry for rating your story one star! It's really good, and I was just teasing you, so don't be sad! I love you (as a friend)!!!

xoxoxo Arpana

Chickie BRONZE said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 10:57 am
Chickie BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody puts Baby in the corner."

Lia, this story is great!! You rock. :D

Shea_N. BRONZE said...
on Nov. 16 2009 at 10:42 am
Shea_N. BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."~Ghandi

Excellent story! Keep writing!

on Nov. 13 2009 at 7:21 pm
very_literary SILVER, Ballwin, Missouri
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this was awesome, loved the twist in the end, great job amazing it totally deserved to be top voted i rated it 5 stars all the way

on Nov. 13 2009 at 10:54 am
Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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haha arpana! I know ur joking!

on Nov. 13 2009 at 1:07 am
Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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haha don't worry about it :) thanks

on Nov. 13 2009 at 1:06 am
Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Oh my gosh you guys! Thank you so much! My article is officially number one in thriller mystery! I was so excited when I found out! Thank you so much!

palumbie said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 7:45 pm
This passage is such an exciting and remarkable story. At a time in the passage, an indication gave me a clue about Eliza in the woods. A clue that gave me a certain thought was when you said, “It’s Eliza. She…she was found. In the forest.” James said”. It gave me that thought that she could be dead. Next, I was also a bit confused when he said that she had the ring. Did that mean it was a bad or good thing that she had the ring? Is that why Eliza ran away into the woods and never came back? You could give more detail at the end to figure out where she went or if James became mad at her or not. But all in all, this story was a very thrilling and cleverly detailed. I expect to see more of your stories in the time to come.

Mrs.Taco said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 12:34 pm
Mrs.Taco, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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This was a great piece you put a lot of thought into this story. GREAT JOB!

MissBlondie said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 12:34 pm
MissBlondie, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequet but that we are powerful beyond measure it is out light not our darkness that frightens us most

WOW. this was like the greatest story ever!

on Oct. 17 2009 at 1:15 pm
pandaLICIOUS SILVER, Portland, Oregon
8 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
“For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone.” -Audrey Hepburn

Great Job Lia! You are sooooo good! And so talented! I love the twist!

pgossett said...
on Oct. 17 2009 at 12:53 pm
im sorry i was kidding it was realllllllllly good pece

lagov said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 6:59 pm
One word to describe this story, amazing! This was thrilling story from start to finish. In the story it sated, “I’ll never let you go, I just love you so!” When I first read that I though she was talking to someone which she was not. In that part of the story I started to become intrigued. Later in the story it states, “It’s Eliza. She…she was found. In the forest.” When I read that I thought that she had died but didn’t know why. Throughout the story it talks about vivid details of how close they have become while she was missing so I would have never guessed the ending. I was shocked when I read this line from the poem, “James, what’s wrong?” I asked. James just stared at my hand in horror. Quickly letting go of my hand, he stood up. “You…you have the ring!” James cried in terror. I smiled. This story was thrilling and mysterious/ misleading throughout it.

hanksa said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 8:14 pm
Wow! What an exciting story! It was thrilling from beginning to end. I like the part where she said,"I'll never let you go, I just love you so much." I thought she was talking to someone, but she was talking to her Thanksgiving dinner. My one question when I was reading was what happened to Eliza? In the story,"The Ring" it said that she was found in the forest dead. The other girl was trying to comfort James because he was upset that his girlfriend, in which he proposed to, was gone. It ended up that James said to the other girl,"You have the ring." The other girl smiled. She was jealous of them. She killed her. That shocked me. All in all, it was a thrilling story full of mystery.

on Oct. 7 2009 at 3:57 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

I LOVED IT! You had my attention from beginning to end! And I especially loved the ending, very shocking! I hope that there will be more added onto this story, it's really good!

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 5 2009 at 10:57 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

This is a really good piece of work! KEEP WRITING YOU ARE VERY TALENTED


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